5:41 AM, Thursday September 2nd 2021
Starting with your arrows, these are quite well executed. You've drawn them with a good deal of confidence, which helps you to convey the fluidity with which the arrows/ribbons move through space. You're also employing the line weight fairly well, in that you're focusing it on the areas where overlaps occur (at least in many of them - some of them you push beyond that limited scope, applying line weight to perhaps too much, but those are generally the ones to the top of the page).
Continuing onto your leaves, I think you continue to do a good job of establishing how these leaves not only sit statically in the world, but also how they move through the space they occupy. I have noticed however a couple issues with how you build up your edge detail:
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You seem to be drawing a single continuous stroke in at least some cases (like this one), having it zigzag back and forth instead of building up each bump or bit of edge detail with individual strokes as explained here.
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You also tend to draw the edge detail with a much heavier stroke, pressing quite hard on the pen and ending up with a thicker line. This encourages the idea that the later phases of construction are meant to replace those preceding it, which is not the case. Each phase of construction builds upon what's already there, only adding the elements that change. In the future, try to maintain a consistent line thickness, and add line weight as its own separate pass towards the end, focusing on establishing how forms overlap one another and limiting it to those specific, localized areas (where the overlaps occur).
Lastly, while you do have some examples of handling more complex leaf structures well, this one should definitely have been constructed in the manner shown here, with each individual 'arm' being first built up as its own complete leaf structure, then merging them together.
Moving onto your branches, there are a number of elements from the instructions that you're missing here as well:
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Most importantly, the manner in which we transition from one segment to the next is an important component of this exercise. As demonstrated here, we start each segment at one ellipse, go past the second, and stop halfway to the third. The next segment then repeats this pattern, starting at the second ellipse, going past the third and so on. You appear to only be starting each segment roughly where the previous one ends.
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There are also a couple concepts from Lesson 1 that you're missing here - you're not drawing through your ellipses two full times before lifting your pen, and you're also maintaining a consistent degree for all your ellipses, instead of having them get wider as we slide further away from the viewer as explained in Lesson 1's ellipses video.
It seems to me you may have gotten a little ahead of yourself here, and need to take more care in following the instructions.
For the most part, your work on the plant constructions is coming along well - there are a few issues I want to call out, but I see many examples of you applying principles from the lesson effectively. I particularly feel this plant does a great job of establishing the fluidity of your leaves, paired with solid overall structure. Here are the points I want you to keep in mind:
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I see a number of places where you allow certain forms to get cut off where they are overlapped by other forms. For example, this one where the leaves are broken into separate shapes where they are passed over by the other trunk. Drawing each and every form in its entirety is important to understanding how they all exist in 3D space, and how they relate to the other 3D forms around them. Remember that these forms continue to exist even when we cannot see them - they would only cease to exist if we were actually looking at a flat, two dimensional drawing. The goal here is to develop the belief and understanding that they are indeed three dimensional, and that the page itself is just a window that looks out onto a three dimensional space.
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Similarly to the point above, be sure to draw "through" any forms you construct - including the flower pots. So for example, the flower pot on the form I linked above should have a complete ellipse drawn for its base. It should also be constructed around a central minor axis line, to help you keep those ellipses aligned to one another. I did notice that you made an effort to draw the base of the pot for this cactus - it was however somewhat half-hearted. Every single ellipse you draw should be drawn through two full times before lifting your pen, as discussed back in Lesson 1. Do not make the mistake of thinking that what we're doing here is making pretty drawings, and thus striving to keep them clean where possible. Every drawing throughout this course is an exercise. In these constructional lessons, we are merely performing the same task again and again - solving spatial puzzles to help develop our brain's capacity for spatial reasoning.
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Of course, the points I raised previously apply here in your drawings as well - so for instance, in this drawing you effectively replaced the simpler petals' edges with a single continuous stroke, creating an entirely new edge in one go. This should have been built on top of the previous phase of construction (which itself should not have been drawn to be faint/replaceable), through the addition of individual bumps or cuts coming off and returning to that existing edge.
While I do feel you're moving in the right direction here, there were enough issues that were mentioned in the instructions that I feel it'd be worthwhile to have you complete a few pages of revisions so you can demonstrate your understanding. Those pages will be assigned below.
Next Steps:
Please submit the following:
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1 page of leaves
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1 page of branches
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2 pages of plant constructions