Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
7:48 AM, Sunday May 24th 2020
please critic my work...
Lines
Lines are pretty good and confident in general, keep practicing like that and you'll nail the accuracy. Only issue I see is that you got fraying on both ends in some of your lines. Don't forget to place your pen carefully at the start of each line before drawing them.
Ellipses
Ellipses are p good too. Remember that on table of ellipses, the ellipses should touch top and bottom lines, and touch the ellipses at their sides. It's hard to do it, but be sure you're aiming for it.
On funnels, remember that the minor axis should cut the ellipses in 2 even halves, same thing, be sure you're aiming for it.
Boxes
P good job overall too.
You're repeating some lines, so remember that no matter how off a line is, you shouldn't repeat it.
I also think you aren't plotting some of your lines, so if this is correct, don't forget to place starting and ending dots before drawing each line. Be careful with that, as it's pretty important to apply the ghosting method.
On organic perspective I recommend doing more overlaps. You can clarify after the overlaps by adding a confident, drawn with the shoulder superimposed line on the part of the silhouette of the boxes that overlap. Perspective on them has issues but you'll work on it on the box challenge, so don't worry about it!
Next Steps:
First of all, congratulations on finishing lesson 1! Your next step is the box challenge.
As I marked this as complete, you are now qualified to critique lesson 1 submissions.
-Doing critiques is a way of learning and solidifying concepts. I can atest to that after having done hundreds of critiques. There are a lot of concepts that I did not understand, and thanks to critiquing I started understanding them. Which made me learn a lot more through the course.
-Another thing is that as the number of current submissions is super high, if you critique some critiques, those would be less critiques I'd have to critique before reaching your next submissions, so you'd get your critiques faster.
It's totally optional of course, I won't force anyone to give critiques. But me and the other people who are critiquing would be super grateful if you gave it a shot.
Good luck on the box challenge, and keep up the good work!
NOTE: here's a quick guide on critiquing lesson 1 submissions.
There are a few people that feel hesitant to critique because they feel they aren't ready to it so hopefully it'll help you in case you are one of those people.
thanks man appreciate your help
Hi Abhijitdebnath,
Congratulations on finishing the first lesson, i know it requires a lot of effort and patience to go through the exercise, you did a great job.
Overall impression and action points:
line: You have a very nice confident line, it is smooth and already show a sense of depth, less pressure for lines further away
ellipses: they are smooth, the main improvement i see here is for the bigger ellipses.
the bigger ellipses are sometimes floating
try to draw more from the shoulder or move your page to draw from a more comfortable position
try to limit maybe to 2 times drawing through the ellipse otherwise it gets a bit messy
boxes: line work on boxes are good, be aware when you sense that you are rushing
main improvement is to review your ghosted dots before committing to the plane, to make sure lines that need to be perpendicular to the horizon are correct.
review the boxes that are further away from the vanishing point and compare them to the one that are closer.
review the box from the bottom, there is a tendency to draw a triangle at the bottom.
Overall excellent job and keep up the good work in the next challenge!
Below you can find my notes, hopefully you find this critique useful.
Stefan
Notes:
funnels
nicely drawn through ellipses, maybe limit to twice as it otherwise gets a bit messy.
nicely touching the top, bottom and side
with more practice they will get more packed
on some of the funnels the last ellipse falls short (try to ghost a bit bigger)
also in the middle funnel there is some floating ellipses
Table of ellipses
- the bigger the circles get the more floating there appears to be.
- (not sure) maybe try to draw more from the shoulder
- (or) rotate or move the page in order to have a more comfortable position to work from
Plotted perspective
- i like your line work, the lines further back have a lesser weight which gives a nice 3d feel. Watch out not to make the Y in the middle to thick and only emphasize the outer lines of the box.
- some of your lines are not perpendicular to the horizon, maybe you could have reviewed your dots before committing to the line.
Rough perspective
- the farther away from the vanishing point, i see similar convergence used as the boxes closer to the vanishing point.
- try to review your dots, ghost your dot and put another dot if you feel you need to refine your accuracy.
- line work is good, confident lines
- most of the time you keep the horizontal lines in line with the horizon.
line - ghosting
- very smooth confident lines
Organic perspective
- line work is confident, however i also sense some lines are more rushed than in your previous exercises
- i noticed when you draw a box from the bottom you tend to go for almost a triangle, where you are giving one of the two angles to much convergence.
- for the boxes that are off, review similar boxes on your plotted perspective, in the exercise extend your lines on the box to see where you went wrong.
Rotated boxes
- great job, again line work looks appealing nice confident, not much overshooting, also shadow gives a nice effect.
- You have a nice rotation on the first boxes, afterwards however moving up / down you draw maybe to close in the same vanishing point. left right, the movement of the rotation is good, however if the width of the plane is smaller the rotation would come out better.
Again great job!
Next Steps:
250 Box challenge
thanks for you critic i learn lot from it...
so, should i move to the 250 box challenge now?
Yes you can start with the 250 box challenge.
keeping in mind the pointers given above.
Good luck!
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Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.
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