Hi I'll be handling the critique for your lesson 2 homework.
-Starting with the organic arrows sections, make sure you are drawing confidently as you want to keep your arrows as smooth as possible, accuracy will come with mileage. There are spots where your arrows bulge/narrow suddenly, this is an issue because it gives the impression that your arrows are stretching which hurts their solidity.
Aside from these points you did a great job exploring the rates of foreshortening and keeping your negative space in mind so good job there.
-Moving on to the organic forms with contours, you are doing a great job drawing them, but there is still room left for improvement, keep in mind that we want to avoid overstrectching, pinching and ends of unequal size. This is minor observation as I can see that you are already moving in the right direction.
You are making a good job when it comes to drawing your contour ellipses, sometimes you overshoot or undershoot them, so keep practicing them.
I'd like you to play more with the degree of your contour curves, and I'd suggest that you don't try to fit in many curves, a few well placed ones can do a better job than many wobbly ones.
-Moving on to the texture anlysis, I can see that you are definitely focusing on cast shadows, the only thing that you could practice would be to try to make the shidt on the gradient more subtle.
-Continuing on to the dissections, I think you have kept up the good work, focusing on those cast shadows, you demonstrate that your observational skills are developing. I only have one observation, I'd like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.
-Moving on to the form intersections, I think you could try to fill in your page with more forms, but overall you are doing a good job, and your forms seem to belong to the same 3D space. The intersections themselves are not the focus of this exercise and we'll be going over them again in future lessons.
-Finishing this critique with the organic intersections, your forms beging to wrap around each other believably, but when drawing your shadows you don't push them far enough to cast, instead they mostly hug the form creating them, try pushing them further. Your shadows also tie into how you perceive the 3D space you're constructing, while you want to draw through all of your forms we only draw the shadows that would be visible to the viewer.
Next Steps:
Before moving on to the next lesson I want you to do one more page of organic arrows, draw as confidently as you can and take as much time as you need to draw your lines to the best of your ability.
Thank you so much for your critique, it was very insightful.
Here's the new organic arrows page, I ghosted the shadows and the added line weight, although they are still not very good.
Okay, this is definitely what I wanted you to do, the only thing left for you is to keep practicing ghosting the lineweight and doing this exercise in your future warm ups.
So now you can move on.
Next Steps:
Lesson 3
Great! Thank you!
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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