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5:14 PM, Monday November 6th 2023
Congratulations on getting through lesson 3! On to the critique...
Arrows: This is a great start! You have smooth, swooping lines, and follow well with the second set of lines. You also have some good tapering going on. This exercise does need 2 more elements, though. First, you need to clarify your overlaps. Second, you'll need to add hatching where it belongs. (Like so: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4 ) Both of these things, in addition to the taper, help the viewer "read" what is in front of what more easily.
Leaves: These look good, with some nice variety and dimensionality added in.
Branches: This one is challenging to do accurately, but it looks like you've got the ellipses varying and following the minor axis line.
Plants: You have a nice variety--bells, leaves, paddle shapes, as well as containers. I can see you are thinking through the forms. On page 4, it might have helped to have those petal lines curve all the way up to the stem, following the bell shape, so they feel more connected to the bell. You used texture really well on the sunflower, and planned the petal placement well.
I notice that you often drew 3 plants per page (one one of the plants, it meant that you didn't have room to do the ellipses in the stems). Don't worry about this for now, since you got enough solid plants in, but when you do lesson 4 (bugs), keep it to one bug per page so that you have plenty of space to feel out the forms. This also makes it easier to use your whole arm while drawing, which is one of the skills Draw a Box aims to develop.
Next Steps:
Add the line weight and hatching to the arrows, as shown in the link.
Other than that, off to lesson 4!
8:45 PM, Monday November 6th 2023
Thank you!
7:48 AM, Tuesday May 21st 2024
Sorry for the extremely late reply. I got caught up with school but now I am back to doing Drawabox. Here are my revisions for the lesson. If you have time can you give me some feedback? https://imgur.com/a/x5uL7MN
4 users agree
7:22 PM, Tuesday May 21st 2024
Hey, no rush. School comes first.
These look good--you've got the hatching and the overlap in. The upper right arrow might be backwards, since the hatching reads opposite to the taper (the hatching makes it look like the thinnest part is closest, rather than the thickest). However, it overall looks like you've got the idea, and I'd say to move on to the next lesson!
Next Steps:
Onward and upward to lesson 4!
8:09 PM, Wednesday May 22nd 2024
Oh, I see what you mean about the top right arrow. Thank you!
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