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11:52 AM, Tuesday November 24th 2020

Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.

You're making a lot of progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson, I do notice a few things to work on and I'll be listing them below to hopefully help you in your future attempts of these exercises.

  • Your arrows are off to a good start, just 2 quick notes here. The first being that there are some spots where your lines get a bit wobbly so make just keep in mind that you always want to be drawing confidently. The second being that you could push your foreshortening of the negative space between the arrows curves a bit more, by foreshortening the arrow and the negative space you can really sell the illusion of an arrow moving through 3D space as discussed here.

  • When it comes to your organic forms with contours you're close to keeping the form simple but do over-complicate it in a few spots. Try to keep the idea of a simple sausage in mind, we want to have both the ends of our form roughly the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form itself as shown here. When drawing your contours in the future also try to keep in mind that you want their degrees to shift along the form as well, your could push the contour lines further. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows. Your rain on glass is a step in the right direction, by focusing on cast shadows we can create gradients using implied information, this is incredibly beneficial when we want to create focal points in more complex pieces. You can read more about the importance of focusing on cast shadows here.

  • If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page, we'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Overall the majority of your forms here are looking solid, good work.

  • Lastly in the organic intersections exercise, I'd recommend trying to simplify your forms and piles a bit more, at the moment they're complicated enough that they lose some solidity and cut into one another awkwardly in some spots rather than wrap around each other smoothly. I'd also recommend pushing your light into the top left or right corners and trying to push your shadows further, at the moment they're mostly hugging the form creating them rather than being cast on to the form/ground below.

Overall you do have some things to work on but this was a solid submission showing that you're starting to grasp the concepts introduced, just need some more experience working with them. With that said I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to the next lesson.

Keep doing previous exercises as warm ups, and good luck in lesson 3!

Next Steps:

Do previous exercises as warm ups.

Move on to lesson 3.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
1:16 PM, Tuesday November 24th 2020

Thanks for your feedback, that was incredibly useful!

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