Hello,

To be honest everything looks good, your elipses are snug, most ghosted lines are straight, and your rotated boxes are done properly. The only thing I will say is that at the beginning some of your superposed lines seemed to curve but this can easily be fixed with practice or intentionaly curving in the opposite direction which will help your brain make more naturally straight lines.

Hi Forgetful! Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and welcome to the Draw a Box community! I'm Kaili, I'm one of the other students in the course, so this won't be official critique but hopefully it helps you out. Please feel free to reply with any questions regarding the critique, or give me a ping in The Official DaB Discord Server if you need anything answered urgently.

You've done an excellent job getting through Lesson 1 but there are a few things I want to point out that will hopefully help you as you get further along in the Draw a Box lessons.

Lines:

Superimposed lines, Ghosted Lines, and Ghosted Planes

These were all done well. On your Superimposed Lines exercise, there was no fraying on both ends, so great job there. As for the Ghosted Lines and Planes, I'm noticing toward the ends of your lines you have a tendency to create a small wobble or arc. This is telling me there's a good chance you're trying to steer your line toward the end dot and focusing on your desire for accuracy. This is NOT a skill issue - it's a matter of process, and the active decisions being made (or the passive choice not to exert control over your actions). It stems from the fear of making mistakes. I strongly encourage you to commit to the stroke and remember: the moment the pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has passed. At level 1 our primary focus should be to have straight confident lines regardless of if we over or under shoot our goal.

Otherwise, very well done on all three exercises!

Elipses:

Tables of Elipses, Elipses in Planes, Funnels

Great job! You've drawn through your elipses twice, most fit snuggly in the table/plane/funnel, and I'm not seeing any major deformities. There were just a few noticeable errors on your Elipses in Planes exercise, so remember the goal here is to fit those elipses snuggly in each plane. This accuracy will come with more practice, and you've already created a good foundation to work off of. You did a good job keeping your alignment to the minor axes in the Funnels Exercise consistent. Keep up the good work!

Boxes:

Plotted Perspective

These came out amazingly. It's very clear you have a good understanding of two point perspective based on this. You've correctly plotted back to your VP, and your lines are perpendicular to the horizon on your verticals. My only tip here would be to be wary of the back line as one or two came out a little crooked. This is to be expected due to the collection of human errors being made while crossing all the lines back to the VP, but I encourage you to do your best to have those back lines come out as perpendicular to the Horizon as you can. Otherwise, fantastic work!

Rough Perspective

Very well done. The backs of most of your boxes are actually rectangular/square, you've plotted back to the VP, and it's clear you were able to analyze your mistakes and adjust as you went through the exercise. One thing I want to remind you of though is to make sure you are properly employing the Ghosting Technique. There are quite a few wobbles in some of your lines, and this is usually indicative of improper ghosting or nerves. Just like with the ghosted planes and lines, our goal is straight, confident lines regardless of if you over or undershoot your objective. It may be a good idea to review the levels of the ghosting exercise before adding these to your warm up pool. Otherwise, Great job!

Rotated Boxes

Amazing job! You clearly rotated the boxes and didn't rely on a vanishing point for them as the lesson said and you have the correct set up for this exercise. The lines are very clear, and your spacing is consistent, you drew through all your boxes, and you drew all the boxes for the exercise! (It's pretty common to unintentionally miss a few, so great job making sure you got all of them!) This is a great starting point for this exercise, being as complicated as it is. You're already off to such a good start here, so keep moving forward!

Organic Perspective

Great work! You have not used dramatic foreshortening nor did your lines diverge as they got further away from the viewer, and it's clear you've mostly employed the ghosting method throughout this exercise. Two things I would like to point out though: be wary of over using line weight, and make sure you're ghosting your hatched lines as well. For the line weight- if everything is too thick, it can flatten out the image rather than express depth, so it's important that we are mindful of where and how we are utilizing the technique. Additionally, we should also be making sure to Ghost our Lines when we are adding line weight so that our lines are clear, confident, and evenly layer on each other. Ghosting is going to be very important during the 250 box challenge, so its very important we make sure we're doing it correctly! Otherwise, Awesome work! Keep it up!

Conclusion

Overall, this Lesson was very well done! I think you're ready to get into the 250 box challenge! Keep this feedback in mind when you're going through these exercises during your warm up. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and good luck taking on the challenge!

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