Finally finished this Lesson! This one was hard (especially the texture analysis exerise) but I found it kind of fun and I actually learned from this, particularly the texture exercises. It really helped me despite being the most stressful out of all of Lesson 2. Hopefully someone critiques this, as always I appreciate anyone who does it.
Hi there, I'll budge in and critique you.
Thinking in 3D:
a). Organic arrows - Good, I see you've applied variety in the arrows ; all arrows express a degree of perspective. You also drew through the lines themselves, which is spot on. Hatching placement feels natural and unforced. My only complaint so far has to be you drawing over your lines. One stroke is good enough. The superimposed lines makes the arrows look unkempt and doesn't allow observers to see how confident your mark-making is. Also, it expresses an attempt to hide your mistakes. Overall, it's a good first try but just be mindful of this practice of drawing over lines next time. I recommend that you practice the ghosted lines exercise from lesson 1 in your spare time to gain more influence over your pen strokes.
b). Organic forms with contour lines - Here's what you did well: You drew your sausage forms, nothing complex, very simplistic. The sausage body is properly aligned outside of the axis line and I enjoy you adding slight curves to show perspective. You drew through your ellipses, which is very good. However, there are sausages that are misaligned with the minor axis. This is demonstrated with the upper left, top, close upper right, and lower right bottom sausages. Try dividing the sausages into three then drawing the ellipses there. Remember, the sausage in perspective curve, so make the ellipses curve by following the arc of the contours as well.
Everything else was pretty okay. Don't think too deeply about this, just practice it a bit more and move onward.
The second portion of the exercise I can see some creativity in shape, but try to keep things simplistic to make the perspective aspect of this exercise much easier, otherwise it's good.Texture:
a). The first exercise was okay. The crumpled up paper must have been angled in hard light, and it can be quite tedious. Don't be afraid to sparse the darker values with more white negative space as it gives the shadows more weight but illustrates the transition much better.
b). You had a lot of fun with this one. It's really good. You found a lot of unique textures too! Your understanding of 3d space applied to the contours improved a lot as well! Good job!Construction:
a). Intersecting lines - This one is a very difficult exercise because it relies on you estimating the initial intersecting line and using that to interpret how far/ deep the object is positioned. I'm not going to go deeply into this one because I believe you'll pick it up later, but I will comment that you should aim to make the objects a tad bit more eligible by spacing out some of the shapes a bit, or using less shapes. The hatching could also use a bit patience
b). Organic intersections - This one is a bit difficult because of the contour context but you did well, however, it would have been great to see more contour lines and overlapping cast shadows. The second page is where things went a bit chaotic, but that's only because you reached for the sun and attempted to use complicated forms. The more complex the form, the more overthinking goes into the practice and the more errors you'll make. It's a bit jumbled, a stark difference from the first page. There were too many parallel sausages. Think jenga the next time you do this exercise. Needless to say, you will improve. Next Steps:
My final comments:
You have a good eye for 3d space when applying texture, and you know proportions and aren't afraid to experiment. To improve, take some more time, read over the material carefully, be more patient with yourself and you'll do excellent. I would implore you to do over the intersecting sausages in your spare time just for practice. Maybe even practice some the stand alone sausages. You can move on. And remember to do your best!
Hi, thank you very much for the critique. I wasn't expecting anyone to actually look into this so I really appreciate this. I've taken a few notes to make sure I remember them next time. Patience is something I struggle a lot, I have this problem of sometimes rushing my artwork because I just want it to be done already. This is same with practicing drawing sometimes because studies can get pretty boring sometimes and it drains me sometimes. If you don't mind, maybe some advice for patience could help me out.
Patience is like learning to walk. If you try and get up too quickly you will fall. I struggle with patience. There's an exercise that I used to do two-years ago, and it was blind contour. It helps you to slow down and see. I'm the least patient person but everyday I try to be a bit better. I believe that you can as well, so never give up. All of us will be the artists we dream of being.
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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