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7:40 PM, Wednesday October 7th 2020

Hi, and welcome! I doubt that your camera takes images of a 280 by 373 resolution, but that’s the size of them in this album, unfortunately, so I am unable to judge them. If you’d be so kind as to upload them again, in a larger resolution, I’ll be glad to.

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When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:46 PM, Wednesday October 7th 2020

I am sorry for my technical incompetence, I havent used Imgur before. Does this work?

http://imgur.com/gallery/U2HIHb2

7:08 AM, Thursday October 8th 2020

Yup! And no worries! Let’s look through this~

Starting with your superimposed lines, these are looking good. They’re smooth, lined up at the start, and of a consistent trajectory. There’s the occasional wobble in your arcing ones, so I’ll remind you that our goal here is for them to be confident, rather than stick to the guideline, but overall, these are solid. The ghosted lines/planes look quite good, too, and the only thing I’ll recommend is to plot some start/end points for the non-diagonal lines of the planes.

The table of ellipses exercise is a bit of a mixed bag. The main issue with it is that your ellipses start off wobbly, then stabilize in their second rotation. It’s important to remember that accuracy is taken care of in a previous step: the ghosting step. Once you commit, your brain shouldn’t have a say in how the line turns out any more- you’re just repeating the built up motion. If you’re not confident in it, keep ghosting. But once you stop, and commit, do so confidently. The ellipses in planes exercise suffers from this, too. The reason this is bad is because a wobbly mark cannot be used as the foundation for a solid construction. A confident one can, and we can work around it’s inaccuracies. The funnels are similar, in that sense, but, thankfully, your ellipses are snug, and properly aligned to the minor axis. Hence, all you’ll need to do before you move on is fix this issue of confidence.

The plotted perspective exercise looks clean- nicely done. The rough perspective exercise is good and bad. You’ve kept 2 sets of lines and infinity, and had 1 converge, as per the instructions. The convergences are fairly good, too, though they could be better. See if you can spend some more time planning them, if you can. Once you place a point down, don’t assume that it’s correct. Check if it is, and if it’s not, replace it- it’s perfectly fine to. The linework is a bit of an issue, however. It’s, for the most part, confident, but there’s a lot of automatic reinforcing present. Remember that each line is drawn once, and only once, regardless of how it turns out. Solid attempt at the rotated boxes exercise. Their back faces seem to have been a struggle, certainly, but you’re not expected to have a good sense for that just yet. For now, all we’re looking for is an exercise that has been seen through to the end, and, ideally, has its boxes snug, and rotating. This one does. Finally, the organic perspective exercise looks great. Your boxes are of a consistent, shallow foreshortening, and increase in size as they get closer to us. In addition to their many overlaps, this does a good job of selling the illusion of flow.

Before I have you move on to the box challenge, I’d like to address the confidence issue in the ellipse section.

Next Steps:

Please submit 1 more page of the table of ellipses exercise, that’s conscious of all of the things pointed out in that section of the critique.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
2:26 PM, Friday October 9th 2020

https://imgur.com/a/yLslexF

I did a few more pages, this is the last one. It feels a lot more like drawing straight lines now, and I've been thinking of that as the "confident" feeling, so I hope I'm right. The "circles" (at the top) felt a lot less like my brain was struggling this time.

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