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6:20 AM, Thursday July 14th 2022

Hi Cupu,

I'll be the one doing your critique today.

  • First off your superimposed lines are great. They all start from the same point and don't have any fraying at the beginning. Fraying at the end of the line is fine as we are looking for confidence in the stroke rather than the accuracy. Your ghosted lines also look fine and quite accurate. There is a slight wobble in 1-2 lines but this will go away with practise. Your ghosted planes show this wobble a bit more so keep this in mind and ensure that each stroke you draw has focus on confidence instead of trying to reach the end point accurately.

  • Your table of ellipses looks good and you've drawn through each circle twice. There is a bit of overlapping in some ellipses and a few instances of going over the bounds of the table. Try to keep within the bounds when doing your warm-ups. However you've shown confidence in each stroke so this is good. Do note that when ghosting your ellipse, think about the symmetry of the axis of the circle as well. While accuracy isn't the main point of the exercise, as you do warm ups and future lessons, it would be something to keep in mind. Your funnels look great! All the ellipses are nice, symmetrical and evenly spaced within the funnel. A little bit of tilt is present on the ellipses in the edges but again, it's something to be aware of and avoid the next time you do these exercises.

  • Your plotted pespective looks fine so theres nothing to say about that. Your rough perspective however has a things I'd like to point out. Some of the boxes look like there's been a bit of guessing. Have a look at this section again as some of the lines are neither parallel nor perpendicular. This is a hard task so try to practise this a bit more. Again there is that wobble we've seen before too. You've correctly extended the plotting lines to the horizon and not to the VP so well done there as some students mistakenly do this. Another thing it that, your lines frequently overshoot the end point. This is seen both in this exercises as well as the organic boxes exercise later too. To avoid this, ghost your line, mark the paper and then lift your hand. This may help in avoiding the overshooting lines. Do a few ghosted lines to practise this. Ghosted lines is a the basis of this exercise.

  • Your rotated boxes looks great! It shows you have a good spacial awareness and you've kept consistent spaces between the boxes. Well done here as this is significantly harder than the other exercises you've done thus far! Again we see some wobble in your lines so this is something you really need to be aware of. You can also revisit this exercise again to check your progress and if you got slightly better in terms of rotating the box in the future. This is a great test for that.

  • Your organic perspective boxes started off fine but then you starting losing confidence in your strokes towards the end. The double strokes on each pane show this. This was something we specifically avoid. This is another version of chicken scratching. Re-read mark-making to understand why we avoid this. Aside from this and the overshooting lines mentioned previously, there is a nice flow within your boxes showing a sense of perspective so thats good.

Well done on finishing the first lesson. :)

Next Steps:

I would like you to re-do one page of organic perspective keeping what I've said in mind before I mark this as complete just to ensure you're aware of the aspects that need improvement with your boxes.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:39 PM, Sunday July 17th 2022

Hey! Thanks for the feedback Here's the organic organic persperctive boxes re-do

3:59 AM, Tuesday July 19th 2022

The organic perspective you have re-done looks fine. You've placed confident strokes and thats the main important thing. Please bear in mind the overshooting lines and ghosting your line before marking your paper. Mark your start and end points, ghost and then draw the line from the shoulder. This is crucial. I will mark your lesson as complete. Good luck for your future lessons and well done so far! :)

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