4:55 PM, Sunday January 22nd 2023
Your lines look confident and straight, well done!
Same as above, good work! If you’re working with A4/similar size paper, you may want to draw some lines across the wider section of the page.
You’re correctly lining up at each starting point, well done! I’d only recommend throwing a few more lines in and not worrying about overlap.
Your planes look accurate and you’ve set out points for each line beforehand, they look good! The only (albeit small) thing I noticed was that the bottom right plane on one page wasn’t fully done.
Your ellipses are drawn through 2 - 3 times and look confident, well done!
Tables of Ellipses
Some sections of this exercise have ellipses which don’t quite hit their boundaries, and I’d recommend less tiny ellipses - it’s okay to just have space in some places!
Ellipses in Planes
Some ellipses hit their boundaries width/height wise but don’t hit both - it might be useful to try making your ellipses wider or more “circular" when ghosting.
The lines separating funnel sides are missing, which can make proper spacing at the center difficult. There’s also inconsistency in minor axis alignment / degrees - for this exercise, we want the alignment of our ellipses' axes to stay the same, and their degrees to stay the same or consistently get larger moving outwards.
Your boxes use parallel lines which converge at a single vanishing point, use clean hatching, and are well constructed - good work!
You’ve done well applying the concepts of perspective to each box, good work!
Each box should be drawn through (like the plotted perspective exercise) - we also only need to take our perspective guidelines back to the horizon line.
The only other thing I noticed were some vertical lines which weren’t going straight up (which for this exercise all of them should).
The top/bottom sections’ boxes don’t get "compressed" (look shorter) as they rotate - this makes them look taller/wider than they should. Other than that, your boxes are rotating, drawn through, and are put close together, well done!
You need to complete two full pages of the organic perspective exercise - you’re almost there, you just need to finish up that second page.
You’ve avoided dramatic foreshortening on smaller/far away boxes, and scaled them as they move back, well done!
Not much else to put here, except this: the critiques I’ve given don’t mean you’ve done badly/failed the exercises. You’ve gained a very thorough understanding of Lesson 1’s concepts - you came here to learn, and you’ve done just that. Keep moving forward!
You’ve learned all the concepts Lesson 1 teaches! The requests I have are less revisions and more polishing up what you have:
Finish your rough perspective pages by drawing the lines you wouldn’t normally be able to see for each box, and then use guidelines to take their vanishing points back to the horizon line.
Finish the second page of the organic perspective exercise.
If you have any questions/concerns, let me know, and I'll do my best to answer them!
12:24 PM, Monday January 23rd 2023
thankyou so much! u listed out things which i didn't see. Organic perspective was a bit difficult for me
thanks again! i'll get back to you with my work at the earliest.
3:30 PM, Monday January 23rd 2023
8:37 PM, Monday January 23rd 2023
I only noticed this 'cause behance isn't a domain we've whitelisted (so it goes to the spam filter where I have to approve it) - but it's fortunate that it did. You replied to your own message. You'll want to reply to the original critique so the other user is notified of your reply. Responding to your own message would not notify them.
10:21 PM, Monday January 23rd 2023
No problem! I'm glad I was able to help :D
Like Uncomfortable said, I won't get notified unless you reply to the original critique - luckily enough, I didn't see the first notification until now, so I saw both messages.
Your revisions look good! You've drawn through your rough perspective boxes, and finished the last page of organic perspective.
Your next step is to tackle the 250 box challenge.