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3:34 PM, Saturday August 8th 2020
Hello!
Arrows - It would help you to add extra line weight to the 'dominant' line of your arrows (as described in the lesson), and then add the cast shadows. This will save you from wanting to redo the cast shadows because you will have already mapped out how your arrow is turning in space. Also make sure to ghost and draw your lines quickly so that they don't come out wobbly. Good job changing the width of the arrows to add perspective.
Contour Ellipses - I think some ellipses don't quite have their minor axis aligned to the center line, so just watch out for that. A lot of ellipses look pretty wobbly and lack confidence, which makes the exercise harder imo. A table of ellipses might be a good warm-up.
Contour curves - It looks like a lot of curves are coming out as straight lines, so make sure you ghost these lines as ellipses, but then only draw one side of the ellipse. Also to me it looks like the curves have their minor axes aligned really well.
Texture - I think you made good use of the silhouette in your textures, especially in the turtle. Remember to avoid scribbling, or random marks. In things like metal scales, it's good to draw the scales individually so you can show them interlocking and give them more dimension. Try to see your textures with more dimension. For example, I think you could've made the octopus tentacles with more dimension, maybe drawing them as cylinder instead of circles. I think doing construction exercises will help with this. I'd also suggest drawing your sausages bigger so you don't feel cramped.
Form Intersections - Push yourself to see the forms as intersecting, not just touching. Push yourself to draw the intersections through the planes of the forms, not just along the edge. Make your best guess and see if you were accurate. Looking up pictures of 3D models helped me (but don't use these as a reference to copy from) to get a sense of how to draw intersections. This exercise is really difficult, so keep it up!
Organic Forms - Make sure your cast shadows are following the contour curves of the surface they fall on. If they fall on to different forms, make sure they wrap around both of those forms. Kind of imagine placing a flat circle on your forms. Also if you don't have a brush pen, I recommend just using a sharpie or a marker.
Good luck in the future, make sure to keep practicing these exercises as warm-ups!
I hope this critique could help you out, let me know if anything wasn't clear so I can give a better feedback next time. Thank you!
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10:16 PM, Thursday August 27th 2020
Thank you so much for the critique! Sorry for the late reply; I was really busy with getting ready for college and stuff so I couldn't check for a critque. I see that one recurring thing that keeps holding me back are the ellipses, and all shapes that include that. I will practice them more to get better so I can make at other shapes like the sausages and contours on the sausages. I also agree that I wasn't being aggresive enough in intersecting the various 3D shapes in the Form Intersection excercise. Overall, your feedback was really helpful!
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A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.