Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. Congratulations on getting through the lesson and there's no need to be embarrassed, it is dense and time-consuming.
Your Organic Arrows pages are really well-done. The lines are confident. You utilized width and compression to create a very convincing illusion of 3D space. In the future, try overlapping your arrows and making them larger.
The Organic Forms exercise looks good. The degree of the ellipses could be varied more and remember to keep the ends the same size, though you did well keeping the forms simple. Your contour curves hook around properly and will get less flat with time.
Your Texture Analysis page looks beautiful. You did very well creating the gradients. Your use of stippling is used like hatching on the rock texture gradient, which you should avoid even if it looks really cool (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/2/formshading). Uncomfortable does say stippling is okay in controlled doses - I believe he refers to it as "controlled randomness", but you're creating a gradient I think is only reflective of the light level and not actually pits in the rocks. Please send me the reference to correct me if I am mistaken.
Your Dissections pages are equally excellent. You did well wrapping the textures and breaking the silhouette. I have no issues with these pages, you clearly studied the textures closely.
The forms in your Form Intersections should be equilateral to each other, the same in all three dimensions. (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). You could've fit more forms on these pages. I would recommend placing contour ellipses on more of your spheres to help sell three-dimensionality, but this will be covered more in Lesson 3.
The Organic instersections pages look great. They are convincingly placed and all of them are drawn through. The contour curves could use more variation to better describe the forms.
Next Steps:
Lesson 3 is next.
You're doing great so far.
Thank you very much for the critique, I appreciate it! As to the stippling, I'm sure it wasn't completely based on the actual shadows and pits in the rocks as I no longer have the reference picture(s). I will definitely keep that in mind in the future and try not to make the same mistake though. Thanks again!
You're welcome, I am glad to help.
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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