11:51 AM, Friday April 7th 2023
Good going! Skimming through the pages, everything looks good so consider that a pass. Let's review everything anyway to see if we can get you some useful feedback.
Lots of creativity! You made all sorts of curves and ribbons, I appreciate it. A few of your ribbons even have full twists instead of curves, you drew them well but it wasn't quite part of the exercise.
You understood the foreshortening part quite well, differing the width of the ribbon depending on how far in front it is, as well as changing up the space between the curves.
Do pay attention to your lineweight though, you overdid it. Just a gentle line is enough to be able to tell overlap, but yours are clearly visible, I'd even call them thick. Too subtle is better than too noticeable, in this case!
You only uploaded one page, did you forget the second one?
The shape of the sausages look good. Consistent in width with a slight bend, not too complex a shape. Your ellipses follow the shape of the sausage nicely, and I can tell you've tried to switch up the degree of the ellipses as well, though I'm afraid you were holding back a bit too much still. If you look at the example, you can tell the ellipse width really changes from thin to wide: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/ellipses
You did not quite make full gradients in your texture analysis page, there is no transition from dark to light. Imagine a very bright light on the right-side of the boxes, shining a light to the left. The goal is to imagine which shapes are there on the page, and draw only the hard shadows of the shapes that stick up. Because the light is located on the right, the further you go left, the more shadow you'll find, ending up in a full black shape.
For the dissections similarly, you ended up with mostly the same texture leaving a gap of white, as opposed to making a proper gradient from light to dark: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/notransition
Also, your dissections don't follow the curves of the sausage properly, causing a rather flat look: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/7/curvature
Jeez, you went full ham on this exercise. I don't know if this is A3-format paper or you just made small shapes, but you made plenty of them! Awesome. They look good too, you draw nice spheres and ellipses, and most everything is drawn in proper perspective. I'm impressed.
However, you did draw with a large amount of foreshadowing, which results in a somewhat messy look. The idea of this exercise is to draw shallow perspective, nearly isometric even. When the amount of foreshortening differs per object, it becomes really hard to think about intersection.
As for the intersection lines themselves, you've drawn them a bit arbitrarily, but that's okay because that wasn't the goal of this exercise anyway. No worries about that.
Look fine, though be careful of drawing complex shapes. You should avoid draping your beans in this exercise, they have to retain their original shape and just lean against/over eachother. A bunch of your shadows have a bit of a weird shape. A few of them hug the form of the sausages they are cast from: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/shadows
Other shadows are drawn properly on the body they're on, but don't follow the shape of the body they're drawn onto. If you cast a shadow on a curved surface, the shadow will follow the curve of the surface it's cast on.
That said and done, the sausages are otherwise well drawn and you have plenty creativity in your composition.
I'm doubting. I'm gonna let you pass without asking for some additional pages, but should you find the time, consider re-doing one Texture Analysis and one Form Intersections page anyway. You draw well and your concept of perspective is solid enough to just continue.
The textures were quite messy, however, and you didn't quite grasp the idea behind gradients.
As for the intersections, try and draw a few shapes with similar foreshadowing, as opposed to mixing dramatic and shallow ones.
On to Lesson 3 you go!
(but take into account the feedback you got!)
4:48 PM, Sunday April 9th 2023
Thanks for such a valuable critique
I think the main reason behind my fear of texture is the present of complex forms and details. Even if I look on a particular area only and try to draw from that particular area, then my lack of thinking that does not exist comes! Like in the case of thinking of light source and doing transaction between light and dark is a little complex for me. I don't know as to WHEN AND FROM WHERE should I start to decrease dark and increase light.( Consider me a little selfish and analytical lol)
Pentel Pocket Brush Pen
This is a remarkable little pen. Technically speaking, any brush pen of reasonable quality will do, but I'm especially fond of this one. It's incredibly difficult to draw with (especially at first) due to how much your stroke varies based on how much pressure you apply, and how you use it - but at the same time despite this frustration, it's also incredibly fun.
Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.