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7:50 PM, Friday November 6th 2020

Hi! Let me first address your questions. In regards to #1, a full understanding on how to construct a box, much less rotate it, is not something we expect from our students right now. Mostly, we’re trying to see whether you’re able to have a bunch of objects that seem like they would fit together in a scene. As for #2, yes, all lines are drawn from the shoulder. It’s not, in fact, a question of size. With that out of the way, let’s look through this~

Save for the occasional altered trajectory, your superimposed lines look good- they’re smooth, and properly lined up at the start. Your ghosted lines look quite good, too, and you make good progress towards fixing your overshooting issue during your planes exercise.

The table of ellipse exercise looks good. Your ellipses are smooth, rounded, and of a consistent degree/angle in a frame. I notice that you won’t always rotate around them 2 full times, however, so be sure to do that. Also, see if you can lift your pen off the page at the end of said rotations, rather than flick it off- it’ll get rid of those tails at the end of them. The ellipses in planes exercise is mostly good. Though there’s the occasional bumpy ellipse (remember that our #1 goal here is for our ellipses to be smooth, and rounded, not for them to hit all 4 sides of the plane), this seems to be the exception, rather than the rule. The funnels exercise looks good. There’s the occasional misalignment, so I’d definitely suggest spending a little longer ghosting each ellipse, remembering to rotate your page as necessary, but it’s not a huge issue.

The plotted perspective exercise looks clean- nicely done. The rough perspective exercise improves nicely throughout the set (save for that left-most box in the last frame; what happened there?), though there’s still a couple of things to point out. First, your linework here is of a much lower quality than in the lines section, though this shouldn’t be the case, as what you’re doing is essentially the same thing: drawing a single line, from point A to point B. Try not to get too caught up in the big picture- they’re just lines. On that same token, be careful not to correct an incorrect line. It doesn’t hide a mistake- quite the contrary, it makes it stand out more. The only other thing to mention is in regards to your convergences. Though they’re mostly good, especially by the end, I’d still spend a little longer planning them. Remember that you’re not obligated to stick to your initial points. If you find one to be unsatisfactory, absolutely re-do it. The rotated boxes exercise looks fairly good. It’s big, your boxes are snug, and rotate comfortably. There’s a couple of them that haven’t been drawn through (I counted 2), and some of their far planes are a little flat, but this is not a huge deal. Just, next time, see if you can spend a little longer considering why each line is behaving the way it is. The box challenge should give you some more insight in regards to this, too. Finally, the organic perspective exercise looks nice. Some of your boxes look a little strange, but not to worry- you’ll find out why as you progress through the box challenge (hint hint: it’s to do with the size of the inner angles of your original Y shape.) What’s important is that they follow the flow line, increase in size as they do, and maintain a consistent, shallow foreshortening- which they do. Solid work.

I'll be marking this lesson as complete. Feel free to move on to the box challenge.

Next Steps:

250 box challenge

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7:45 PM, Sunday November 8th 2020
edited at 7:46 PM, Nov 8th 2020

Hiya Benj,

Thanks for much for the great feedback. I'll try and carry on these points into the 250 box challenge.

Just a few things i wanted to ask:

  1. Could you clarify what you meant by "bumpy" during the ellipses in planes exercise? Does this just mean the (2) lines i create to form the ellipse should be closer together. Is it recommended to do this at a faster pace when drawing the ellipses?

Though there’s the occasional bumpy ellipse "

  1. For the Funnels exercise, do all of the ellipses keep the same position/angle as eachother but just differ in their minor width (so they increase as the ellipses get further to the exits of the funnel?) I can see there are a few examples i tried to have the exiting ellipses on a slight tilt in comparison to the other ellipses, is that right?
edited at 7:46 PM, Nov 8th 2020
7:09 AM, Monday November 9th 2020

Hi!

  1. Very simply, that your ellipses aren’t fully circular. Example. This usually happens when the student is more concerned with the accuracy of their ellipses, than their confidence; it’s their brain taking over, and making ‘corrections’, but the correct thing to do would be to trust the original ghosting motion, and make a smooth, rounded ellipse. Accuracy is not a concern for us, after all.

  2. There seems to be a small misunderstanding in regards to your funnels. The ellipses increasing in degree as they move further from the center is an optional goal. The actual goal of the exercise is to align them to the minor axis- that is to say, to make sure that they’re cut into two equal, symmetrical halves by it. As such, the minor axis being a single, straight line, they cannot be tilted.

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