Hi chogi, I'll be critiquing your work. First of all congratulations on finishing lesson 1! Not everyone manages to push through something as hard as this so you're already awesome! My critique will be structured similarly to the actual lesson's structure.
Lines
Your superimposed lines look great, I can see your marks are executed confidently, and you've kept your fraying on one side. The few curves you've attempted also look pretty solid, a few miss the mark a bit more than with the straight lines, so when doing this exercise as a warmup I'd suggest to do a few more curves as well!
Ghosted lines: your lines look generally fairly straight, which is great considering this is the first exercise where that's being developed. Sometimes I see a little bit of arching towards the defined dot, which suggests to me that you're focusing a little more on accuracy than on straightness & confidence, your priorities should be flipped. This can be helped by executing your marks a little bit quicker, or by keeping your eyes fixed on the dot you want to ghost towards, allowing your arm & shoulder to freely do the work. Overall, great attempt.
Ghosted planes: I can see your line confidence has improved here significantly. To combat the overshooting I'd suggest to ghost a little bit more slowly (I know I said to ghost a little quicker in the previous exercise, there's basically just a small margin of ghosting speed that is ideal, and you need to figure out that exact speed by trying out different speeds consciously. This is only relevant once your lines are consistently straight, otherwise you're tackling too many problems simultaneously). I do see that your lines are not only drawn confidently, they're also really accurate, good job!
Ellipses
Tables of ellipses: You've fit them snugly within the defined borders, the orientation & degree within each cell is consistent, you've experimented with a wide range of degrees, you've drawn through your ellipses multiple times. Noice. The confidence at which you've drawn your ellipses varies a bit, ghost more for each ellipse and don't forget to engage your entire arm when doing both the ghosting motion and the actual mark making. The ellipses also don't always have the right shape. This is fine for now but try to really feel a somewhat circular motion in your shoulder when ghosting, and maybe vary the speed a little bit (around the edges faster than around the elongated part, if you get me)
Ellipses in planes: the confidence is starting to develop there, noice. It's good that you've not gone for touching all four sides yet since the ellipses themselves should first get in shape, maybe you can try going for the four sides with the advice that I've given for the previous exercise.
Funnels: Your ellipses are getting more consistent in shape, and you've generally kept in line with the minor axis of the funnels, noice! When you choose to do this one as a warmup, I'd suggest to play a little bit with the degree of each ellipse relative to its position in the funnel.
Boxes
Now onto everyone's favourite part!
Plotted perspective: looking good! Pay a little more attention to keeping your vertical lines exactly perpendicular to the horizon line, you can do that fairly easily with a ruler. That will get rid of the somewhat misaligned backside.
Rough perspective: first of all: don't try to get rid of your failed marks, shapes or forms. You're always your harshest critic, and someone critiquing you will point out your mistakes and how you can improve upon them. Every mark you make is a commitment, and trying to erase these marks by scribbling (for the lack of better word) over it just diminishes the value of these commitments. I can see the problem with the top right one, the leftmost vertical line isn't exactly vertical. That's fine, next time you just need to place the dots like you always do, and if you notice one of these dots is off, you can just place another dot and ghost towards that one! Dots are much less of a commitment than actual lines, so this method is perfectly fine. Your boxes look fairly decent, and it's great that you've checked all of the convergences :] one thing I do want to note is that the depth lines that are close to the horizon line, but far from the vanishing point, will converge much more extremely than you'd expect, so don't be afraid to try out some real extreme convergence with these!
Rotated boxes: I ain't seeing a lot of rotation going on. Let's zoom in on the middle horizontal boxes, starting in the middle (the initial box that's essentially a square with a smaller square within). The one to the right is done correctly, you can clearly see the convergence of the lines going to the right vanishing point is different between boxes. Now if you go another box to the right, the convergence to the right doesn't change, meaning the vanishing point hasn't shifted and thus there's no rotation. The outermost right box should converge a lot more extremely than the one before it. And this applies to each direction; the closer you get to the edge, the more extreme your convergences should be. I suggest looking closely at what Uncomfortable is doing in the video for this exercise, and maybe look into Scyllastew's video as well.
Organic perspective: noice, some boxes look a little wonky but that's to be expected when being unable to draw through your forms. Again, f'd up boxes still need to exist, don't try to erase them. You'll get an improved spatial reasoning by doing the 250 box challenge.
I see you've done a second attempt of Rotated Boxes, don't do this. It's a hard exercise so no one expects you to nail it the first time, but since it has been asked of you to hand in 1 page, don't hand in 2. One more thing I can add as feedback on the exercise itself however, is: keep the lines of adjacent boxes close- and parallel to each other. As an example: if I number the boxes 1-25 from left to right, top to bottom, boxes nr 14 & 19 (directly below each other in the lowerright quadrant) should not have their adjacent edges diverge, they should stay parallel.
In general, great attempt, you're ready for the box challenge
Next Steps:
Move on to the 250 box challenge, pick 2-3 exercises and do them as a warmup before each (drawabox) session.
Take regular breaks. It's a marathon, not a sprint!
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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