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9:58 AM, Friday December 18th 2020
Hey Akarumei,
first of all, congrats on completing lesson 1, first step is achieved! Second, there's actually not too much about your work to be critisized, it's overall a pretty solid submission.
Lesson 1 is mostly about confident linework, which is clearly visible here!
Lines
There's a clearly defined starting point in the superimposed lines exercise, fraying only at one end, which is good. The lines are also smooth and confident. Getting them more straight and precise will come with practice.
The Ghosted Lines also look good. Confident, smooth, and swift strokes and the lines are straight in a lot of occasions. The few slight curves will be fixed with time and practice. What I do notice is that in quite a lot of these lines they fade away towards the end because you start lifting your pen too early. Try to draw the line until you reach your mark, then lift off the pen. If you overshoot a bit in the beginning, that's no big deal, put pay attention to it. (Also, there are a bunch of lines where it did work perfectly fine)
The same applies for your ghosted planes.
Ellipses
Not much to complain about either. Ellipses are properly drawn through, lines are smooth and confident. Getting the accuracy into the ellipses and thightening them more is again a matter of practice. Ellipses in the funnel exercise are well aligned, there are like 2-3 three where the minor axis is off a bit (talking about some of the outer ones), but that's no big deal, it's still pretty clean. Well done.
Boxes
Plotted prespctive: Clean work, the lines converge nicely at the VPs, hatching is done well, so solid work here.
Rough Perspective: Lines have been drawn with a confident stroke. Only thing to mention here is that you tried to cover up mistakes with redrawing the lines. Don't do that. If you miss a line, there's no problem with that, this is what the exercises are about: failing the lines from time to time to steadily improve. We work in Ink to spot our mistakes easily. We want to see them. So don't bother about it if a line is too short or missed the mark. Just leave it and move on ;)
When plotting back the lines it becomes visible that estimating the perspective lines of the boxes is still difficult for you, as some of the guide-lines are quite far from the VP. Pretty common in the Beginning, it'll become more natural with practice.
Organic Perspective: Again, confident an clean linework, which is good. Also, you understood that boxes become smaller with increasing distance. The only thing that's off is the convergence of the lines. Often, your lines diverge instead of converge, leading to some weird box shapes. I suggest you take a closer look on how to construct boxes in 3-Point-Perspective (this will also be necessary for the 250 Box challenge, which is up next).
rotated Boxes: Good job on this exercise. The Boxes are all drawn through properly and the linework is clean and confident. Some of the inner planes don't really match up with the outer planes, but this exercise is pretty difficult so I think that's fine.
I usually provide some visual feedback when giving critiques, to help people understand better what I mean.
Take a look at this, it might help you.
All in all a solid submission. Well Done.
Next Steps:
I suggest integrating the ellipses in planes exercise into your daily warmup to increase line and ellipse accuracy.
Up next is the 250 Box challenge. Be sure to take a look on the construction of 3-Point-Perspective Boxes, as there were some problems with that in the organic perspective. The 250 Boxes will help you with your estimation of lines convergin towards a VP and your general understanding of box-rotation in 3D space.
5:12 PM, Friday December 18th 2020
Thanks a lot for the review, I appreciate it. The link is crashed, could you please send it once more.
7:24 PM, Friday December 18th 2020
12:56 PM, Saturday December 19th 2020
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