I feel that there are a number of areas in which you could improve in, some big and some small.
Smaller Areas:
I have noticed that not much perspective was used in your "Organic Arrows" exercise. I would definitely keep this in mind, as much of Lesson 3 will be focused on this particular concept!
Your textures look detailed and mostly convincing. The only problem that I have is that it seems like you were trying to draw the forms as well as the shadows. Drawing only the shadows is very difficult, so I wouldn't worry too much about this, especially because you don't seem to have this issue on the "Dissections" exercise. It appears to me that the issue lies exclusively within drawing shadows that transition to light.
Speaking of the "Dissections" exercise, there were a few textures (grass and fur specifically) that I felt could have broken the silhouette, but did not. Breaking the silhouette makes for strong, informative textures.
Bigger Areas:
You didn't do a page of "Form Intersections" only consisting of boxes as stated in the homework page. Overall your other form intersections look good, but a bit timid.
Your sausages have very odd shapes in the "Organic Forms with Contour Lines" exercise. It appears to me that you made two parallel curves and then rounded the ends off. I would review on sausage making from the video and this infographic. Judging your sausages, most appear to be elongated, with some having different sized ends. Overall they are not very appealing. You do, however make good, but deformed ellipses inside of them, which is more of the point of the exercise anyways.
The biggest problem that I see is that it doesn't look like you are applying the concepts from the "Organic Forms with Contour Lines" exercise on the "Organic Intersections" exercise. The cross sections feel more arbitrary than planned out to push the shape of the form (The shadows also feel somewhat arbitrary, but this is a finer point). I am also having a hard time reading those pages overall. Where the sausages themselves also placed arbitrarily? I would recommend keeping the sausages in a more simple stack, as shown in the video and the example.
Overall, I see some particular areas in which you can improve, namely with your sausages. Unfortunately I will have to ask you to make some corrections before I can mark this as complete.
Next Steps:
1 filled page of the Form Intersections exercise (only consisting of boxes)
1 filled page of the Organic Forms with Contour Lines exercise (contour curves, not ellipses)
2 filled pages of the Organic Intersections exercise
Welcome back to Drawabox! I apologize for not responding to you sooner!
Your "Form Intersections" are looking really good here. I see a few wobbly edges, but a majority of the lines look very clean and intentional.
The shapes of your sausages in the "Organic Forms with Contour Lines" exercise are also looking much better, but now the ellipses are looking a bit off. In your corrected sausages, the ellipses seem to all have been drawn very shallowly and have little variation in angles. Adding more to the hook could potentially help with this, but as you have already demonstrated this concept in your previous assignment, I am not too concerned about it.
I am seeing some big improvements with your "Organic Intersections"! I am finding these much easier to read overall. I see that you have applied the same technique for ellipses as the "Organic Forms with Contour Lines" exercise, which is a big improvement from your previous submission. These contour lines also seem to have the same problems as well, so refer back to those corrections of drawing your ellipses less shallowly and with a bit more variation. I am also seeing big improvements with the placement of the shadows!
Overall, I think you did an excellent job with these corrections! I wish you luck as you continue to move on through the next lessons!
When it comes to technical drawing, there's no one better than Scott Robertson. I regularly use this book as a reference when eyeballing my perspective just won't cut it anymore. Need to figure out exactly how to rotate an object in 3D space? How to project a shape in perspective? Look no further.
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