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5:51 PM, Friday July 24th 2020

Congratulations on completing lesson 1!

You did a good job overall and it looks like you learned a lot by the end. Starting with your super-imposed lines, you made a lot of really straight, confident looking lines. You do the same in your ghosted lines with very few signs of hesitation or wobbling. You also did a really well constructing your planes with a lot of confident, straight looking lines. I can see that you took your time with these assignments and did your best on each of them.

You showed a lot of really great progress when it comes to your tables of ellipses. I can see that you struggled a bit at first with keeping your ellipses confident and evenly shaped. But by your second page you do a much better job creating smooth, confident and evenly shaped ellipses that fit neatly in their alloted space. In your ellipses in planes homework you do very well too. There are a few ellipses that you drew through too many times. But the rest look very good, so just try to remember to only draw through your ellipses 2-3 times while doing Drawabox. Lastly for this section we have your funnels homework. Your ellipses look really good here as well. You maintain that smooth, confident, even shape and fit your ellipses inside the funnels nicely. I do see that some of your ellipses here are tilted along the minor axis. If you ever notice your ellipses are tilted you should rotate your page until they line up correctly.

With your rough perspective homework I can see you put in a good deal of care with where you placed your boxes. Your horizontal lines do a good job of staying parallel with the horizon and your vertical lines are fairly perpendicular. There is a bit of a dip in your overall mark making quality and construction here. Keep in mind as you progress through Drawabox and begin to construct more complex forms that it is important to put in the time and focus required to execute each line correctly and to apply the ghosting method to every step of the process, as explained here. You should also frequently refer back to the instructions to ensure you are doing everything correctly and to the best of your current ability. I would also recommend that you read this comment by Uncomfortable, where he talks more about hesitation.

The rotated boxes exercise is a challenging and complex exercise. You did really well for your first attempt here. You drew through your boxes correctly and you got a good amount of rotation along the major axes. The gaps between your boxes do not stay very consistent which forces you to use some guess work, as explained here. I can also see that you tried adding some additional weight to your boxes. When you go to add weight to a line it is important that you treat the added weight the same way you would a brand new line. That means taking your time to plan and ghost through your mark so that when you go to execute it the mark blends seamlessly with your previous mark. This will allow you to build and create more subtle and clean looking weight to your lines.

Finally with your organic perspective boxes I can see some room for improvement with getting your sets of parallel lines to converge more consistently towards their shared vanishing points. That is something you will work on more in the next steps. Keep in mind what I said before about adding weight to your lines and make sure that you do not try to cover up or "fix" any mistakes you may make going forwards. Just remember that the confidence of the stroke is far and away your top priority. Accuracy is something that you will improve on as you continue working through Drawabox and practice ghosting.

Good luck with the 250 Box Challenge!

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2:01 AM, Saturday July 25th 2020

Thank you for the feedback! I'll try to have consistent convergence and be more confident with my lines in the box challenge.

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