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2:05 AM, Saturday May 14th 2022

Hi Teitoklein! Glad to know you're enjoying the course so far. The homework was pretty well done, though I've pointed out some mistakes below.

Lines

Super imposed lines: On the top right of the page as well as some of the longer lines, the lines are frayed at both ends. Try to ensure that you start at the exact same point everytime you make a mark. The longer lines also have slight arches; this might be because you're drawing from your elbow, not your shoulder-try to be conscious and make sure your elbow isn't resting on the table.

Ghosted Lines: The ghosted lines are pretty good! There's slight wobbles in some longer lines but are overall steady and confident which is what the lesson is aiming for.

Ghosted Planes: Some of the planes' bisecting lines miss the centre of the plane. In the 1st page, the 2nd plane to from the left is missing 2 of the bisecting lines.

Ellipses

Tables of Ellipses: Some of the ellipses are a bit deformed and overlapping each other and spilling into other parts of the table.

Funnels Exercise: Some of the ellipses are slanted and don't fit snugly within the arches. Some of the ellipses also don't pass properly through the minor axis (line through the middle of the ellipses).

Boxes

Plotted Perspectives: Well done!

Rough Perspectives: On the 1st page, 1st frame on the leftmost box, one of the lines was redrawn multiple times. In the future, try not to redo your lines.

Rotated Boxes: Pretty decent!

Organic Perspective: On both pages, frames 2 and 3, I would suggest having the swoopy line (the part closest to the viewer) touch the edge of the frame to further promote the illusion of perspective. On pg1 frame 2 and pg2 frame 2, both the first and last box are almost the same size, which breaks the illusion of perspective.

Overall, nice work! I hope you continue to improve and enjoy this course :)

Next Steps:

I'd suggest 1 page of the Ghosted Planes and Table of Ellipses.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
4:48 PM, Sunday May 15th 2022

Hi ABEANBERRY. Thank you for your kind comments and pointing my mistakes. I have take some notes from your comments and try to learn from my mistakes. Here I've tried to remake what you've asked for.

Sorry if I have bad English for it is not my first language.

Thankyou.

https://imgur.com/a/XyaCkaf

6:00 PM, Sunday May 15th 2022

Looks much better! I'll mark the lesson complete.

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5:30 AM, Monday May 16th 2022

Okay thank you ABEANBERRY :)

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