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2:24 AM, Sunday November 13th 2022
Starting off in the arrows section your lines are looking smoothly and confidently drawn. You're doing a good job maintaining a consistent width as your arrows widen while moving closer to the viewer and with more mileage you'll become more consistent. I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step2
Moving into the organic forms with contours exercise you're doing a good job keeping your forms simple, however I did notice one you did that was a little more complicated than the usual. Not a big deal but it really isn't needed. Not to mention on the later lessons keeping them simple is vital. Your confidence in your strokes is great, the rounded edges of the sausage forms and the quality of your lines is proof of that. The one this I did want to point out is that they should be the same width on all sides. A lot of them tend to be smaller on the opposite end. As for the degrees of the ellipses and contour lines they are incorrect. You seem to make them wider towards the front face of the sausage. It should be the opposite. You also seem to be aligning the ellipses with the minor axis pretty well.
Your textures seem to be pretty good. Make sure to remember when drawing textures that we are only drawing the shadows that forms create, not the forms themselves.
On to the form intersections. You really aren't expected to fully grasp this yet. That being said, you unfortunately did them completely wrong. You seem to be largely marking what forms are in front of other forms. What is actually supposed to be done is the forms intersecting with each other. You can think of it as the forms combining. New lines will be created wrapping around the forms. This is a tough one, but vital.
As for the organic intersections you do a great job demonstrating that your sense of 3D space is developing as your forms begin to wrap around each other believably. You're keeping your forms simple and easy to work with which is a good strategy to help produce good results. When it comes to your shadows you're pushing them enough so that they cast rather than just hugging the form that creates them which is a great start. Your shadows appear to be following a consistent light source, be sure to experiment with different angles and intensities when trying this exercise again in the future. I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner of the page to start with, it's easier than working with a light directly above your form pile.
Overall you did pretty solid, but I need to make sure you can at least somewhat grasp how forms should be intersecting. I'm going to assign the following revisions. I recommend re-reading and re-watching the form intersection section multiple times, even WHILE doing it. It really helped me out and I'm sure it will do the same for you. Not only whe form intersections be absolutely VITAL to the course as a whole, but the entirety lesson 2 will be.
Next Steps:
2 pages of form intersections: 1 with boxes only and the other will all shapes.
1:26 PM, Saturday November 19th 2022
Thank you so much for your detailed critique. The Form Intersections exercise was pretty hard at first attempt but this time my understanding of the relation between forms got a little better I hope I nailed showing it on the page.
Here is my revision ; https://imgur.com/a/fDmXa2f
1:51 AM, Sunday November 20th 2022
I would say this is good enough. You really aren't expected to get it at this point. They will become important in lesson 6 and 7 so make sure to practice them during warm ups. I'll go ahead and mark this as complete.
Next Steps:
Lesson 3
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