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10:08 PM, Tuesday January 3rd 2023

Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. I'll be taking a look at your submission today. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. With your ghosted planes you didn't fully bisect them in both dimensions. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/11/step4 Please pay careful attention to all of the instructions for each exercise as you will be assigned revisions for not fully completing them in the future. I'm noticing that you are getting quite a bit of wobble in your ghosted lines and planes. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/wobbling This is also quite present in some of the later exercises although I am seeing improvement with your final exercise but I still want to mention this advice here so you can understand what the problem likely is.

This is the important part we need to be focusing on and the real problem I'm seeing:

You're hesitating as you execute the line, rather than drawing with a confident motion. Finally committing to a mark can definitely be quite daunting, but it's integral that you get used to accepting that mistakes do happen. Things go wrong - you can prepare as much as possible (and you should) but the moment your pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has already passed. Now you must commit yourself, push through with confidence, and execute your line. It's also worth remembering: we can still work with a line that is smooth and even, but there's not much that can be done with a wobbly one.

What's most likely happening is that you are worrying about accuracy too much while making your mark and it's causing you to slow down your stroke to compensate which is giving you quite a bit of wobble in your lines. That hesitation because of your concern for accuracy while making your mark is what is reintroducing the wobble into your lines. Try and rely a bit more on the muscle memory you build up while ghosting your mark and almost make your mark without thinking. This will be less accurate at first but will give you consistently smooth and confident linework which is our first priority. Accuracy will come with mileage and can't really be forced.

our ellipses are largely suffering from the exact same issue which really just goes to show that once you fix this problem it will improve every aspect of your drawing and that improvement is very evident with your organic perspective boxes and the line confidence I see there. Your tables of ellipses is coming along okay. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and while you seem to be focused on consistent ellipse shape you are getting quite a bit of line wobble trying to be accurate. This is carried over into your ellipses in planes and you are still deforming your ellipses at times. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/12/deformed This is likely happening because you are too worried about accuracy and are probably slowing down your stroke to compensate. Try and rely a bit more on the muscle memory of the motion you build up while ghosting and almost make your mark without thinking. This will be less accurate at first. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come through mileage and consistent practice more than anything. Your ellipses in funnels are having the same issues and you are also tilting your ellipses off the minor axis at times. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/notaligned This is something you should always consider when drawing your ellipses. There is a lot of room for improvement when it comes to your ellipses both in terms of overall consistency of shape and smoothness so as revision I'd like you to do one more page of ellipses funnels. Focus on a smooth consistent shape and really commit to your mark. Don't slow down your stroke for the sake of accuracy as that is why you are getting a lot of line wobble in your ellipses currently.

The plotted perspective looks good although a few of the vertical legs on your boxes are slanting a bit. It's important to realize in a two point perspective drawing like that all of your vertical box legs should be perpendicular(straight up and down) to the horizon line. The rough perspective boxes are having several issues that we need to discuss. You are still getting wobbly linework here and there but I'm starting to see more smooth confident lines throughout this exercise which is a definite improvement. The main issue is that I'm not really sure you understand how one point perspective works and I'd like to remedy that before moving on. I would highly recommend watching the video for this exercise again to try and get a better grasp of how one point perspective works. One thing that can help you a bit when doing a one point perspective exercise like this is to realize that all of your horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line and all of your verticals should be perpendicular(straight up and down in this case) to the horizon line. This will help you avoid some of the slanting lines you have in your constructions. You did a good job extending your lines back to the horizon line but since you didn't really draw any of your boxes in one point perspective they aren't really giving you any information. I'd like you to give this exercise another shot so try doing one more page of this after rewatching the video.

Your rotated box exercise turned out decently. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. Something I'm noticing is that you may have reverted back to drawing from your wrist for some of these lines. Just something to keep an eye on. You should be drawing from your shoulder for basically every line you draw, even shorter ones. The wrist should be reserved for detail work only. Obviously you are struggling pretty heavily with the rotations for this exercise which is perfectly fine given the difficulty. The more you draw and develop your spatial thinking ability the easier these rotations are to handle. Your organic perspective exercises are looking pretty good are showing the most improvement when it comes to wobbly linework. That said your linework still isn't as confident as I'd like it to be before moving on to the 250 box challenge. I'd like you to do one more page of this exercise as well with a focus on confident linework. Make sure you plot all of your points, ghost your lines multiple times, and then make your mark with confidence. No redrawing lines or adding lineweight. Your box constructions are quite wonky throughout and you need to develop a better sense for how box lines converge to vps so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you once we get your line confidence under control.

Overall this submission showed a decent amount of growth but I think your ellipses and line confidence still need a bit of work before moving on. Once you get those revisions submitted and I take a look you can most likely move on to the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

One page of Ellipses in Funnels - Focus on a smooth consistent shape and really commit to your marks

One page of the rough perspective boxes - Rewatch the video to get a better idea of how one point perspective works and give this another shot

One page of the organic perspective boxes - Focus on confident linework. No redrawing lines or adding line weight.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
9:02 AM, Thursday January 5th 2023

https://imgur.com/gallery/1Vli8Oy

Here is the review.

Before submitting the critique I already started the 250 box challenge. should I start over to a correct habit that notices that sometimes I redraw lines or add line weight to correct my lines?

since I am in box number 202.

or should finish it and go to lesson 2?

10:37 PM, Thursday January 5th 2023

Alright so your ellipses in funnels are definitely getting smoother but there is still a lot of room for improvement here so keep practicing these during your warmups.

The rough perspective boxes are also looking better and I'm definitely seeing a lot more confident linework. These are showing a much better understanding of how one point perspective works even if you are still getting slanting constructions lines. Nice work.

The organic perspective is showing the most improvement when it comes to confident linework which is great. You are still getting line wobble here and there though so this is definitely something you need to keep working on.

You don't need to redo the 250 box challenge but for future submissions please wait until you have received your critique and it's marked as complete before moving on to the next lesson/challenge precisely so you can avoid the situation you are running into now when you are doing the next lessons homework carrying over a problem that needed to be dealt with beforehand.

I'm going to mark this as complete and good luck with the rest of the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

The 250 Box Challenge

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
9:04 AM, Thursday January 5th 2023

in review tried go agains it but sometimes i still redraw lines or add line weight

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