Hi, I hope you're having a wonderful day. My name is Saif i will be going over the critique for your lesson 4 homework submission.
2 pages of organic forms with contour curves: I don't see any major issues here, the contours flow nicely and in perspective. One thing I did notice was that at times the contour didn't hook around but otherwise it's smooth sailing.
4 pages of insect/arachnid drawings that are purely constructional with no texture or detail:
https://imgur.com/QZwAF19 This was a really good attempt!! There were a few things that were missing like contour lines at the joints and an additional form at the back (don't worry too much about this right now you will learn how to better deal with additive forms in lesson 5)
https://imgur.com/P2JICXD This attempt was a lot better than the last one, many of the problems I noticed in no 1 are gone here which is awesome! good job! There is one thing that I noticed that overall the proportions are a little off but it's okay we will tackle that a lot more later on so for now this is good!
https://imgur.com/KdiP2t8 No problems here beside the angle of your abdomen
https://imgur.com/c7JSUcX I like the construction here quite a bit, some of the problems I saw was the thorax lacking a little structure (this isn't an issue we will be tackling this in lesson 5 so you will learn how to do it even better once you start the next lesson) and the jaw area being a little too big which is completely okay at this stage since you will be taught better ways to tackle the head in the next lesson where you will learn how to properly construct the head.
https://imgur.com/s09xMMa REALLY GOOD!! The only things I could find to be a little off was the tail part not aligning properly with the abdomen and thorax and some tiny problems with the shape of the thorax and abdomen (it was a bit too round compared to the ref)
https://imgur.com/s46M76d Actually nothing much to critique here, the drawing was missing a few contour curves and i saw some ellipses whos perspective was a little off. The antennas at the top were a bit weird so i added flow lines for the construction in its correct perspective.
https://imgur.com/kwLCpPm Nothing major here either, some things that I did saw was that the thorax shape was a bit off so I added some forms to make it more even, similarly the wing size was a bit off. I did notice that you got a bit lazy with the tail part that the insect is balancing on as it's a bit too thin towards the bottom and is basically just a line so I added a little bit of width to that as well.
https://imgur.com/gBgRdGH My advice for you on this is more of an reminder than an advice. Focus on your construction first then worry about texture, Your texturing work is gorgeous but the underlying foundation is just as important. The abdomen wasn't aligning properly so I added an ellipse to improve that. The main issues I noticed was with the head as it was a bit squished and didn't resemble the reference much so to start instead of an ellipse i've noticed that it's better to start with a box in such cases where the subject is rather flat than round, As always I use the Y method for your box then aligned the horns at the front by drawing ellipses in that box aligned to it's perspective, There is a much better way to align this but that's not really necessary right now and is more so something you will learn more about in lesson 6 so don't worry too much about that right now.
https://imgur.com/jiNJpQV This was really good! I didn't see anything worth pointing out at the bottom half, on the top I noticed that you added the horn a little loosely so to reinforce it I used a variation of the branches exercise from lesson 3 and constructed the horns. For the upper torso I also noticed instead of 2 ellipses it was better to just draw a sausage shape as it looked a lot less messy and matched better with the reference. Overall this was really good! really nice improvement so far! Most of the mistakes I saw in the previous insects were solved at this point so good job! Also special thanks for including a seperate image of just the construction and one with texture it made critiquing a ton easier, on the other image I don't have anything else to critique your texture work is flawless.
https://imgur.com/3l0lVgI Aside the alignment being a bit off and some contour lines missing there wasn't anything else that could be improved here. Even the stuff i saw was pretty much all covered and most of it wasn't apparent after the texturing.
Phew that took a while, I saw a ton of improvement throughout the lesson, most of the problems I saw in the initial insects were pretty much gone towards the end, Congratulations on finishing the lesson and good job! Can't wait to see more improvement from you moving on!
Next Steps:
Good job completing lesson 4, you are free to move onto lesson 5 and tackle some cool animals!! I will attach the main Imgur file so that you can view all the images in one place down below and some pointers moving foward would be to take more care with the initial stages of your construction, flow lines are your best friend so don't shy away from them especially in lesson 5 where proportions become much more important. Good job clearing the lesson, make sure to stay active in the discord server so that you can get really quick instant feedback and utilize this course to the fullest!!
Main imgur file: https://imgur.com/a/hdCVC35
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