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9:42 PM, Sunday April 18th 2021

Form intersections look decent. The shapes all look like they occupy the same space, which is good. Foreshortening is consistent overall.

Texture analysis is fine but a little flawed. The gradients of the two more speckled textures transition from dark to light really quickly, and I think you were a little overly reliant on using dots to create the sense of texture. That being said, you still seem to have done a decent job of understanding those textures; you didn't do that with crumpled paper, so I have to presume that the textures just had that quality.

Organic intersections are alright. Some of the shadows stick more to the forms casting them than to the forms they're being cast onto, but others are fine in this regard. You also have some forms just cut through the others; this isn't wrong per say, but the main objective in the exercise is to have the forms physically laying on top of them. Just something to keep in mind.

Texture dissections are not bad! The textures wrap around the forms and break the silhouette a bit, but the silhouette breaking is very subtle. I think that you could have pushed this a bit more, but you still did a good job overall here. Again, though, try dotting/stippling less for future texture analyses; you'll want your strokes to all be as deliberate and planned as possible.

The arrows have some flaws. Some of the arrows lack an increase in the perceived space between folds. Having distance between things increase as they get closer is important for effectively conveying perspective. The actual arrows always get thicker as they get closer, though, so that's good.

One more thing: line confidence. Your lines on this exercise are rather wobbly, I notice. This is a good thing to work on for the future, be it by ghosting more or making your strokes faster.

The organic forms are good with the exception of one thing: the degrees on the ellipses. The degrees are unchanging in your forms, which is not how they should look. The degrees should get bigger as they get further from the viewer. These two examples from Drawabox itself explain this much more eloquently than I am:

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6822fd02.jpg and https://imgur.com/rXLBxSg

Next Steps:

While there is certainly room for improvement, most of the more troublesome areas come from earlier in the lesson. I think you'll be able to improve things like line confidence and deliberate strokes for textures as you continue.

I say to move onto lesson 3, but do the arrows and organic forms as warm ups. Doing the more simple exercises as warm up is useful for improving yoru performance of the more simple stuff.

Keep it up!

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8:10 PM, Tuesday April 20th 2021

Thanks! I will keep your feedback in mind and add arrows and organic forms to my warm up routine.

3:35 AM, Wednesday June 2nd 2021

You're welcome!

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