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9:56 PM, Tuesday May 10th 2022

No problem, I hope it helps.

You've made some progress here but there's still some work to be done. Your organic forms are a bit pinched in the center but I think you're largely on the right track and with mileage they'll continue to smoothen out. Do draw them larger in the future though as they still can be quite small.

I think your organic intersections are worth another attempt but there's 2 things I'd like you to do when attempting them again.

You focus on drawing your forms in front of one another, instead I want you to focus on stacking them upwards. Imagine a plate with sausages in front of you, they should stack upwards while wrapping around the form below.

When it comes to the forms that you did stack upwards in this attempt you didn't draw through them so their ends get pinched as they make their way behind the largest form. Draw through all of your forms, try to think about how they wrap around one another.

Please complete 1 more page of organic intersections, if you have any questions before getting started to help clarify any misunderstandings feel free to ask them.

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1 more page of organic intersections.

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8:02 AM, Monday May 16th 2022

I watched the whole lesson again, and tried to think about how the forms wrap in relation to each other, but I honestly don't quite have my imagination figured out yet. Maybe more supporting lines would influence the illusion to be even better? I was afraid that the exercise wouldn't be very clear and I would get lost. Also I would like to ask for advice on how to practice this in the future, what exercises to pay most attention to during warm-ups if I can move on of course.

There's another page:

https://imgur.com/a/6rbbmSg

7:03 PM, Monday May 16th 2022

These are a big improvement compared to where you started.

I have 3 tips for you going forward.

  1. You clearly attempt it here just remember to lay the forms across one another, rather than in parallel to one another. Think of it like putting hotdog sausages on top of one another, but lined up in parallel - your pile would fall apart immediately. Whereas if you piled them up perpendicularly to one another, there's more stability - especially if they're flexible like our sausages here.

  2. Keep working on considering both the form casting your cast shadows, and the surface receiving it. Right now the cast shadows are still kinda glued t othe form casting it, although I can see signs that you're trying to think about it, so just keep working at it as you push forward

  3. When drawing forms over one another try to avoid overlapping them at the peak of the lower form. This helps prevent your forms from looking like they're just drawn over one another as well as helps create the illusion that they're wrapping around each other. It sounds trickier than it actually is, here is a visual example.

With all of that said I think you've shown a good amount of growth and with those tips and some mileage I have no doubt you'll continue to improve. I'll be marking your submission complete and move you on to lesson 3, good luck!

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