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7:35 AM, Thursday March 3rd 2022
Hello and welcome to drawabox!
Oh dear, there's a few things to cover but before that have you read lesson 0? HIghly recommend you to also check out https://drawabox.com/article/ink, because it appears you have either choosen to ignore these or didn't read it because it looks like half your work is done in pencil. You should be using a fineliner or ballpoint pen (which is acceptable in lesson 1 and 250 boxes) for the entire exercise. Pencil is not allowed in lesson 1.
Moving on...
Your linework is clean and the ellipses are nice and smooth so well done on that. On funnels, the minor axis (the line in the middle) should cut ellipses in 2 symetrical halves, some of them are tilted and aren't aligning, so be careful of that in the future. The plotted perspective and rough perspective looks good so nothing to say here.
Normally at this point I'll congradulate you on finishing, but from the organic perspective excercise it looks like you don't really understand the exercise and utilised the skills accumulated from prior excercises. You've done well on the rough perspective which showed a good understanding in the converging to a vanishing point and neat linework which didn't seem to carry onto your organic perspective boxes. Your lines here are shaky, broken and a lot of them do not join together which takes away the illusion of having a 3D form on a 2D plane. Which means they don't resemble boxes anymore and more like just lines on a page. The sizes (closer to us = bigger, further away = smaller) is done well, but the illusion is broken since many of the lines are overextending and don't join together.
Best to reread the homework for that organic perspective. Make sure to ghost through your lines, take your time, don't rush. Make sure your boxes are joined up properly and you're starting every box there with the initial 'Y' structure. The bottom of the boxes will converge a little instead of diverging. You can resubmit what's mentioned above in a reply to my critique. There is no need to redo the excercises done in pencil, but if you ever use them as warmups please do that in pen and use ink for your future exercises.
Next Steps:
Reread the homework for that organic perspective. Make sure to ghost through your lines, take your time, don't rush. Make sure your boxes are joined up properly and you're starting every box there with the initial 'Y' structure.
8:34 AM, Monday March 7th 2022
Hello, first of all thank you for the critic, yes i did read it all and i am using pen for real i am using artline (0.5) but i think some of my lines that make you think are pencil because they are so thin i think, some of my pens that time dont ink well, anyway yeah Thank you ill comeback to organic perspective, thank you so much
12:36 PM, Tuesday March 8th 2022
All good, my bad then if they're in pen, maybe it was just the quality of the photos since they look a bit faint but yeah they're looking fine either ways and thanks for clarifying on that.
8:02 AM, Thursday March 10th 2022
Thank youu so much for the comment
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