Good evening ASH5680! I will critique you submission today. But before I start with the specifics, make sure to rotate your images properly, to make it easier for reviewers in the future. It makes them more inclined to critique, if they don't have to download and rotate the images. No
In your Organic Arrows , the two pages are very different. In the second page (which looks like it might be your first attempt), it's barely a pass, but in the first page (your second attempt?) I see that you are tapering your arrows, and applying the trick of smaller distance between the turning curves, the further away you imagined the arrow to be. You are overlapping the curves like you should. That's great self-correcting! When doing this exercise in the future, try exaggerating perspective and curves even more, don't be afraid to try some crazy things while adhering to the rules. You totally got the assignment in the end, but I'd like to see more confident lines. For the shading, especially, it would help if you added line weight on the curve that overlaps the other.
Your Organic Forms with Contour Lines look good, no major errors here, just a question of curve confidence and practice.
What happened in the Texture Analysis? I can see that you completed the exercise, but not sure why you felt you had to cut out individual squares for each step. If you drew the textures on the squares after you cut them out, don't do this as it makes drawing and using your arm properly a lot more difficult. As for the texture analysis, it doesn't look like you fully understood the purpose of the exercise, so I'd like for you to redo the third column of this exercise before I can mark this lesson as complete. In the last column, you are supposed to organize the textures you studied going from the darkest to the lightest, while avoiding outline scribbles. The texture should come alive as cast shadows overlapping each other, rather than shape outlines. Your major mistakes here are 1) Drawing the outlines and 2) No transition from dense to sparse. Read the assignment, ask for help on Discord if you need it, and try again! I
Because your Texture Analysis suffered, the error of drawing the outline of the texture rather than the cast shadow, transferred over to Dissections. Still, you are doing the turning of the texture correct along the edges of the sausage, so you're minding the curvature like one should, and you definitely breaking the silhouette. This exercise would look even better if you worked with cast shadows rather than outlines, so keep that in mind when you revisit this as a warm-up in the future!
The Form Intersections look good apart from correcting lines instead on one, confident line (even if it's faulty, it's still better than correction lines). It's a difficult exercise, but you managed the task. Make sure to keep practicing this one as you continue your DAB journey.
Finally, Organic Intersections are not bad, but on the first one you are drawing a lot of sausages parallel to each other. That is a mistake, which you seem to correct on your second page. You also seem to try following the contours of the underlying sausage for the cast shadows more carefully in the second sheet, which is the right thing to do. Keep practicing this one, too, as you move on to future challenges.
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Sorry , I didn't post for while case of my job and it's hard to focus for drawing and doing other tasks and alot of events happen so here is my home work I hope did it well https://imgur.com/a/NAj1bk0
Hi Ash!
You did well on your assigment. I see that you understand how the cast shadows change in the lighter areas. Congratulations, you are ready to move on to the next lesson!
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