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5:34 PM, Thursday October 22nd 2020

Arrows

Arrows are looking pretty confident, the issue with them is that they aren't growing much as they get closer towards the viewer. . They should grow like this, or even more exaggerated.

When you add lineweight to overlaps, you do it with lines that are a bit wobbly. Don't forget that every line you draw should be ghosted and confident. As always, confidence is more important than accuracy.

Organic forms

Organic forms are good in general, though there are some of them that get a bit pointy. The ends of the sausages have to be balls, so they need to be rounded.

Other than that, ellipses are a little bit wobbly. Keep in mind that here as well you should prioritize confident ellipses over wobbly ones.

There are also some ellipses which allignment is a bit off, try to be more careful with them.

Textures

Textures are getting a bit messy, and you're relying quite a bit on lines. From now on, approach all shadow shapes like this. It will make it easier to observe and to make them more clear.

The black bar on the texture gradients are too clear as well. Try to make the transition from black smoother.

On the right side there should be a white bar as well, so you can't draw anything on that space. Don't forget to keep it in mind.

Other than that it's a good try. There are only a few places on the dissections where you rely on outlining forms. As explained on the lesson, you can only draw cast shadows, with the exception of when you get out of the silhouette of the organic forms.

Form intersections

Here they are pretty good as well, but a few things:

-There are some boxes that have some clear divergences. Don't forget to check if the lines you're going to draw will diverge before drawing them.

-You're repeating some lines, which makes the drawings messier. If you miss a line it doesn't matter, just keep going to the next line, as if it had been correct.

Organic intersections

Organic intersections feels pretty solid in general, but two things:

-On this exercise you should draw simple forms, just like on the organic forms exercises, some of yours are squished and have weird forms, so don't forget about it.

-Your shadows are sticking to the forms that cast them. Check this mistake here.

-And in here as well as in the texture exercises, try not to leave white dots on the shadow shapes, they're pretty distracting to the viewer. A brush pen can help with this.

Good job in general, contrats on finishing lesson 2, and good luck with lesson 3!

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5:44 PM, Thursday October 22nd 2020

Thanks, I will keep these critiques in mind when I practice these exercises during warmups.

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