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11:18 AM, Thursday January 21st 2021

Hello! Here's feedback for your L2.

Organic arrows -- Looking great. The curves are confidently drawn, hatching is done correctly and shows well the 3-d appearance. Arrows are generally changing in size consistently with each bend. Well done.

Organic forms with contour -- I don't see these 2 pages... did you forget to upload them?

Texture analysis -- The 3 textures look kind of similar to each other, so you can differentiate them more by observing and drawing how the shapes of smaller cast shadows look different from each other. I also think the crumpled paper texture can have more, larger dark areas on the dark side of the panel. Otherwise, I think you accomplished the exercise goal of drawing cast shadows/forms of a texture.

Dissections -- This is the hardest exercise, it's the L2 equivalent of Rotated Boxes - well done on finishing it! Good work on making the textures follow the curve of the sausage and breaking silhouette on the edges. A few textures fall back a bit into outlining or explicit detail (eg. giraffe skin, leather, broccoli), but I think you've done well drawing cast shadows and implicit detail on most of them.

Form intersections -- The main focus of the exercise is to give a realistic impression that all the solids are sitting together in 3-D space without distortion (extreme foreshortening) or contradictory perspective, and not so much getting correct intersections. While I think you could've drawn more forms in the last 3 pages, I think you've accomplished the exercise purpose here.

Also, please mind the linework - especially the ellipses and circles, some of them are drawn-through only once, instead of twice like recommended. I suggest keep on drawing-through ellipses twice, it helps give them more form.

Organic intersections -- The sausages look fantastic, they really have dimension and weight to them. If I had to nitpick, I think the linework is a bit scratchy - it looks like you draw additional lineweight on it, and that unfortunately made some sausage outlines scratchy. If you want to add lineweight, try to do it with a single unbroken line without losing confidence. The cast shadows look great, they are following the contours of the bottom sausages quite nicely.

Good work on finishing L2. Even though you forgot/didn't do the Organic Forms with Contour pages, and I prefer to see them -- the sausages and ellipses/contours in the other exercises look fine to me. So I'll mark L2 as complete. I recommend doing warmups with Organic Forms with both types of contours, and Organic Arrows, since they're used in later lessons anyway. Have fun in L3.

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Lesson 3 is next.

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2:27 PM, Monday February 8th 2021

Sry for late reply !~

Thank You for giving a feedback fpr my homework

I forgot to take the photo of organic forms before I used it for the Dissection section

Will do more organic forms and arrows for warmup

and i took quite some time off after finished the 250 boxes , kinda losing the confidency

thats why some of the lines are scratchy ~~~

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