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1:30 AM, Friday May 6th 2022

Hi! Congrats on finishing lesson one. Here is my critique:

Superimposed lines: The linework is smooth but I see fraying on both ends. The line shouldn't fray from the starting dot - make sure to place your pen carefully at the beginning of each line so this does not happen.

Your ghosted lines look pretty good, as do your ghosted planes. You're getting used to drawing confident lines. Remember to use your shoulder pivot when drawing lines.

Your tables of ellipses look really good! You've drawn through your ellipses 2 or 3 times and you've prioritised drawing confident ellipses over accuracy which is great. Your accuracy will improve with time. The next stage will be aiming to keep your ellipses within the bounds of the table, with each ellipse touching without overlapping. Likewise for your ellipses in planes, your ellipses are confident, but not accurate. They should be touching each side of the plane.

Your funnels look nice, but on some the ellipses are falling off alignment with the minor axis. Each ellipse should be cut into two equal, symmetrical halves. Try starting with a narrow ellipse in the centre and then widening them as they move outwards in the funnel.

Your plotted perspective looks good! Some hatching on one of the front facing sides might make them clearer. Your rough perspective is also nice, I can see that you understand the behaviour of the lines, remembering that lines that go off in the distance converge on the vanishing point, with your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon lines and your vertical lines perpendicular. Keeping this in mind will make one point perspective easier to grasp. You can see from the extension lines that some of your perspective estimates are way off, but this is to be expected at this stage! It'll come more intuitive with practise.

Your rotated boxes came out really well! You did a good job of drawing through your boxes, and the corners of each box are close together. Some of the boxes aren't actually rotating, just shifting in perspective, which is a common issue. These seems like it's happening on the right side, but I see rotation elsewhere. This exercise is really difficult, and will be a great one to come back to later to see the improvement of your spatial reasoning.

Your organic perspective looks good. Again, this is another difficult exercise at this stage. You've grasped the ghosting method, and your box constructions are pretty good! That said, I think there could be more rotations as the boxes extend off into the distance. I think the 250 box challenge is a good next step for practising convergance and rotation in boxes!

All in all, I think this a pretty good submission. Have fun doing the 250 box challenge!

Next Steps:

250 Box Challenge

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2:56 AM, Saturday May 7th 2022

thank you

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