Hello, welcome to the community! Don't be nervous at all, we are all a bunch of students that are trying to learn a wonderful skill for a variety of reasons, and we are here to help each other! In this journey, we'll fail. A lot. Sometimes we'll learn from it (and that's what Drawabox is about, after all) and sometimes, we won't. It's for the second category that this critiques are for. Just do your best, submit, and follow along the advice given!
Now, to your submission:
Superimposed lines: They were very good overall, this is an exercise that takes a loooooot of time to show visible results, and you'll have to go back to your very first attempts to notice a difference. Overall, you got the concept but I saw some flaying at both sides at some point(impatience? Fatigue?) but it was fixed by the end.Also, there is some arcing in the longer lines, which is something you should note. During your future practices, notice that upwards arc, and voluntary arc the line downwards, experimenting with the degree until you get it straight. Keep this practice, and your mind will get it, and straighten it out.
Ghosted lines and ghosted planes are good in general, just try to avoid correcting on top. Keep focusing on smooth trajectory in practice, and then to get accuracy. Nothing future practice sessions won't help.
Ellipses are quite good, they feel smooth and in most cases remained tightly in their confines. Sure there are some cases where they are a bit too small or get out of their confines, but they are the minority. Overall, good job.
Funnels, the ellipses are quite neatly packed inside, but they are of the same degree (the same "fatness" or roundness). They should vary in degree, starting from small (almost lines) to big (practically circles). As they are, they give no sense of change/depth to the object. I'd rather you do one more page of funnels, where you focus on changing the degree of the ellipses.
Plotted perspective is good, no serious comment to make.
On rough perspective, most boxes were okay, but a few were very misaligned. This is quite natural at this stage, and it will improve in the 250 boxes challenge. If you see your corrections, there is an easy tendency to notice. This is good, as you can keep that in mind in your future warm-ups, and autocorrect slightly, until you get pretty close.
Rotated boxes: Very cleanly made, and good construction, but the boxes are all plotted using one VP, in the center. As each box rotates, the VP moves along with the rotational axes. If it rotates horizontally, and to the right, the VP will move to the left slightly. If it rotates vertically and upwards, the VP will move down. When they rotate diagonally to the left and up, the VP will move right and down and so on. Keep this in mind for your practices!
Orgranic Perspective: Good movement and rotation of the boxes, but almost no perspective. The way it is now, you have small boxes in front of you, and huge boxes in the distance, which is probably not what you had in mind. The boxes on the far end should be at the size you drew them, but the ones closer should be much larger, to give the feeling of perspective and depth. I will kindly request one more page of these, in which the boxes size varies according to where they are in the page!
Good job overall, but do note the above two comments. Check the lesson notes and mistakes for both, and submit one more page about them.
Next Steps:
Please check the lesson notes and mistakes for the following lesson, and submit one more page of work for both of them:
Ellipses in Funnels
Boxes in Organic Perspective
In both cases, you did not consider perspective. Please do so now!
First of all, thanks for your detailed critique.
Actually, I had a quite tough time when I worked on organic perspective.
I wasn't really sure about how to draw it. I was wondering whether it is fine by just rotated the boxes along the line? And as the result, there are too many boxes, crowded, and perspective is not obvious.
This time based on the critique, I try to focus a little bit more on perspective.
Since this homework named organic perspective, I reckon that perspective should be important, too.
One more change is I try to reduce number of boxes to make the results less crowded.
I hope this would look better now.
Here is my work: https://imgur.com/gallery/00qIKDC
You are quite welcome, I hope my advice helped you!
Organic perspective was almost impossible to me when I initially submited. My "boxes" (let's call them that so we don't hurt their feelings ^^) were wobbly, rotated in all the wrong ways and followed the rules of chaos. When I return to this exercise now during warm-ups (and after the 250 challenge), the results are vastly different. So don't worry, you'll come back to this exercise in a few weeks and you won't believe the results!
On your re-submissions, excellent job! That's what we were looking, and both funnels and boxes feel more 3D, as the funnels expand better in space, and the boxes move through it.
Keep those thoughts in mind as you use these exercise for warm-ups. The trick is to persuade yourself that you draw in space, and not in a piece of paper!
Keep up the good work!
Next Steps:
You can now proceed to the 250 Boxes Challenge. Be patient, take your time, don't burn out, and draw for fun as much as you work on this challenge!
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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