Lets start with the organic intersections (the sausages stacked on top of eachother.) These are pretty good. A couple of the sausages are too long and complex but you pointed that out yourself.
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4213ce18.jpg
My main concern is that some of the lines here are pretty unconfident and wobbly. This is something you should be working on fixing, especially when you are this far into the course. Remember to always draw confidently even when tackling these large organic forms. I am not going to require it, but maybe spend some time practicing drawing large curving lines or redoing this exercise until those lines are very nice and confident. Go back and review lesson 1 material if you need too, no shame in that.
Overall, the animal drawings themselves are very nice! There are some improvements needed though. Take the dog on page six for example. You drew a sphere for the cranium, but undermined it by cutting into the sphere. Never do this. Always work constructively, adding onto forms instead of eating into them. There are many reasons why this is necessary but here is the main one:
https://i.imgur.com/VdwbRuU.png
You also make this mistake with the crow, and with the page 14 cow.
There are a couple spots where your lines are wobbly and unconfident in the animal drawings, too, but it’s not nearly as bad as in the sausages. Just keep an eye out for it. This tells me that you have the ability to draw confident smooth curvy lines but something about the sausage exercise threw you off, which is understandable. I have trouble with that one too.
Overall, I feel like the construction is a little bit lacking. You could get into more detail and add more to the forms to flesh them out a little bit more. Some images are worse then others, though. Take the page 10 cow for example, the entire snout of the cow is basically a 2d shape with no construction at all. Or the page 5 rabbit, where you did not work additively with the legs, and with the back right leg you drew a connecting line between the joints instead of building up a form there to connect the line of a leg. Would could also add much more masses to the torsos pelvis areas of the animals, usually you only add one big mass connecting them and leave it there. Try to add masses even if they don’t impact the silhouette of the animal.
You could push the construction of the legs specifically much more, like in this demo:
Your head construction is having a similar problem. Remember that the point of these exercises is not to create pretty images, but to make solid constructional forms. You could flesh out the heads a bit more, like in this rhino’s head demo: https://imgur.com/fUIEAu0
By far the best approach to drawing heads in in the tiger heads demo, where you use the hexagonal shapes for eye sockets and a boxy shape for the muzzle, and adding onto the cranium instead of just cutting into it. Use that approach when at all possible and maybe review that demo if you can.
Overall though, great work though. These all look very nice and pretty despite the construction issues.
Next Steps:
You understand the material well enough to move on, but if you want too you can submit any more animal drawings here where you take the criticisim I gave you I will review them for you. I am not requring it though.
Either way, move on to the 250 cyls!
Hello, thank you for the critique, I'll work on my mistakes and will submit more drawings to make sure I got it right!
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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