So this is my feedback.
Your line quality is not confident over most of the boxes. Remember that is confidence over accuracy.
You mostly tried to draw boxes that are almost parallel.
Your hatching looks very messy and has the same problem as the boxes. To get good at line quality you need to practice being intentional.
As you mentioned you did those fundamental "mistakes" and you seems to have to done because you want to finish the challenge as fast as you can.
Your work is steady in quality but the very first page is the best of all. That means that you can do way better if you put the effort on it.
My general opinion:
I think that you are rushing your work. Working slowly and with the time that the excercise require might be boring but it will make you improve. If you decide when you can do any other lesson you are gonna miss a lot of important points. As I already said you can do way better if put the effort necesary to do it.
You said that: "I made some fundamental mistakes I think, like not hatching enough, not ghosting the hatching lines and not superimposing the outlines for example." and I want to mention that those are not mistakes, that is that you are not trying to follow the instructions correctly. If you skip hatching, that is not mistake, that was a decision. Also the other mistakes you point out are not mistakes they are decisions, your are deciding to not follow the instruction. That only hurt your learning and your grow.
In my experiences this challenge takes about a month with a lot of hard work. Be patient that is the only way you really can benefit from these lessons. One of the hidden reason for the 250 challenge to exist is to create in the student a sense of discipline and patient. Measuring the vanishing several times, trying your best at getting those points right, working in your line quality... etc. All of that build mileage and increase your ability to work on the tedius part of learning art.
Finally, participate in the Discord showing your partial work. In that way you are not going to repeat the same mistakes over and over.
Next Steps:
Do 50 more boxes. Having in mind the following:
Do them patiently, this should take you some days, or several hours (like 10) of your day.*
Hatch each of them with care.
Superimpose the lines that are visible to the viewer. That is add lineweight to those line.
Draw at most 6 boxes per page.
Draw bigger boxes.
Also practice your line quality a lot in your warm ups. Remember confidence over accuracy.
*If you ask in the Discord you will find out that 5 boxes take around an hour to be done.
Hi, here are my revisions
Hi!
This is much better work.
I suggest you to continue practicing the exercise from lesson 1 as warm ups since you need to get more mileage.
Well done!
Next Steps:
Continue with lesson 2!
Yeah, I do the old exercises during warm ups, it really helps. Thank you for having me do revisions, they really helped in getting a much better understanding of building discipline instead of focussing too much on just getting it done.
And I already did lesson 2. I kinda rushed there too but I apparently understood the exercises well enough and now I have learned to take much more time in the future.
Thank you for your time.
Thank you for taking your time to write a critique for me. I think you are spot on with almost everything. This critique was quite eye opening to me. Yes, I did rush and yes to make the boxes bad like this were decisions, me deciding to half ass it and not spending enough time to do it properly.
The boxes turning out kinda parallel wasn't my intention. I wanted to draw boxes that had shallow convergence, not to make them parallel. But I didn't do stronger convergences, I will pay attention to that while doing the 50 boxes. Also, part of the reason why the lines are wobbly is that I didn't rotate the page. I wanted to train myself to be able to draw the lines well in any direction but I have realized that this is pointless. Rotating the page is important for now and I will do it for the revisions.
Also, I will hold off from continuing lesson 3 until everything else has been critiqued. Revisions for the box challenge as well as lesson 2. I send in my partial work into the Discord server since joining it. And I will do so too for the remaining boxes.
Thank you, this review really helped a lot.
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