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11:13 PM, Wednesday April 8th 2020

First thing I wanna note with your superimposed lines are that while you did a pretty good job overall on fraying only on your far end, I can see a fair bit of wobbling almost hidden by the superimposed lines, as you course correct the line throughout. this is something you want to avoid, keep in mind we want to be drawing smooth, confident lines here, accuracy isnt the priority, and will instead come with practice as we build up muscle memory.

In your first and second ghosted planes I see a significant change from moving from wobbly, hesitant lines to smooth, confident lines, so great job here, although I do want to note in your ghosted lines I still see a fair amount of arcing, so make sure youre trying to compensate for this by consciously pushing your arm in the opposite direction of the arc in your future warmups, otherwise great job.

For your ellipses - youre looping only twice, so good job, however the shapes of your ellipses are often wobbly and rigid, so ensure youre using the ghosting method to focus on a confident, even shape, and to also keep your ellipses snug with the boundaries and other ellipses, still keeping in mind we want an even, confident ellipse prioritized over one thats accurate. This is reflected again in your ellipses in polanes, while I can see some improvement between the pages, remember to keep this priority. Same for your ellipses in funnels, you did well to align them to the minor axis but prioritize confident, smooth lines over wobbly, hesitant ones - remember to use the ghosting method until you feel confident.

This is repeated again in the first rough perspective, but improves notably in the second one, so great job.

You similarly did great in the rotated boxes, good job.

In the organic perspective exercise, the main thing I want to note is that we want more boxes on the page, and to keep these boxes firmly planted on the line as it flows through space - there was a solid attempt on the first page first box, however keep in mind the first row should be much larger, and should have a significant difference in size between each row as they move back in space. While you did have trouble with rotating your boxes and converge correctly, this will be immediately worked on during the box challenge, so no worries. Only thing to note is that you should try to get your sets of parallel lines within these boxes to converge more consistently, and to avoid diverging as the lines will angle away from eachother in some of your boxes.

To end, the main things I wanna note are your ellipses. We want these to be ghosted until you feel confident in them, and to ahve a confident, even shape, without wobbling or hesitant lines. remember we do not want to prioritize accuracy, instead go for smooth accurate lines here.

Im not going to request revisions as I don't believe it necessary, however I do want you doing some ellipses in boxes and ellipses in planes rotating fairly often in your warmups, just to practice this specifically and get it out of the way.

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That said, good job! This is a fairly solid lesson, so feel free to move onto the box challenge, keeping in mind you should do given in your warmups with advice given.

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3:44 PM, Thursday April 9th 2020

Thanks for the feedback. I tried ghosting my ellipses until i felt confident, sometimes for up to a minute, but when i tried to do the mark i messed it up everytime. I definitely think i gotta work on those ellipses. But thank you for taking the time to analyze my work.

6:44 AM, Tuesday April 14th 2020

if you mean messing up the mark as in being inaccurate and not getting it totally within the boundaries, thats totally fine, and this is something that will go away with practice. just first focus on smooth, confident ellipses and accuracy will come later

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