Hey Doctormein!
I hope you're well. Here is the link to my revisions:
Thanks for looking.
The intersections are still really difficult for me and the organic forms too, I am going to keep practising these exercises in my warm ups. It takes effort for me to try and understand how the form is sitting in 3D space, I really have to visualise this when I do these exercises.
Thanks again for your help and feedback.
I am very happy that you've decided to do the optional homework I've assigned! This'll certainly help me to further understand your work as a whole. Now, let's get right to business.
Organic forms ellipses/curves
I can clearly see your attempt at adjusting what I've mentioned above so thank you! One thing I tend to see with your ellipses is that you're a little afraid of making them wider. I am not sure if this was right assumption to make since I have no idea what could be holding you back, but, if possible, It would be great if you could Widen your ellipses more because this'll help you out with conveying your illusion of 3dness.
This is a Demo I've done for a student in the past. You might want to give it a look!
Your curves seem to also be experiencing this issue a little bit too, but it's not as present as ellipses one. As always, the same principle that apply to ellipses also apply to curves too. (Check the image above for some example on the matter.)
Side notes : Don't forget, no matter how wrong a line is or how disproportionated a form may be, don't readjust or draw over it. Leave the line as it is as if it were correct. And also! It would be great too if you don't leave notes about your misstep in those drawing. It often serves as a distraction to a person who's critiquing you and we often ignore it to give us the ability to try our best to critique without any bias. Don't be so harsh on yourself, we all make mistake.
Form intersections
I can clearly see your effort toward making those form more equilateral, and you've also improved your intersection to be more believable also. There isn't much I would like to critique about this exercise because of how difficult it is, especially the intersection part. Overall, nicely done!
Next Steps:
Though there's some place I would like you to improve more, I believe that as long as you're putting what I've critiqued to use during your warm-up session you'll be right as rain. You might want to focus on Organic form contours/ellipses for a little bit because that's where I see you struggle quite a bit.
Godspeed, Leborian212
Next step : Lesson 3
Post critique notes : You might want to join Drawabox discord and check out #critique-exchange https://discord.gg/tHNrTs4REQ (If you haven't yet.) Because your critique for 250 Boxes is a little bit... lacking. This is just to ensure that you're receiving proper critique and instruction for next step. (I am also a part of critique exchange program too! )
The link you sent for the Organic forms helped so much, the eye level line helps this exercise make so much more sense. I will definitely keep doing these as a parts of my warm up, I'm still lacking security with these exercises- especially the Intersections, my brain hurts when I think about how the forms are sitting and intersecting.
In future I will also do my best to commit to the marks I have made, I still slip up and try to fix things, but I'll keep making the effort. I will also keep what you said about the missteps, I didn't realise it could make the critiques more difficult, thanks for letting me know.
Thanks again for all your effort in this feedback, it has been really helpful- especially the organic contours and elipses.
I'm on the Discord too! I will try and use it more effectively.
Thanks Doctormein, I'm grateful for your help and for the effort you put in!
Stay well!
Some of you will have noticed that Drawabox doesn't teach shading at all. Rather, we focus on the understanding of the spatial relationships between the form we're drawing, which feeds into how one might go about applying shading. When it comes time to learn about shading though, you're going to want to learn it from Steven Zapata, hands down.
Take a look at his portfolio, and you'll immediately see why.
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