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7:20 PM, Saturday November 12th 2022

Hello color! Overall you've done a good job, though there are a few important things I want to comment on:

First on the form intersections a few things:

You're doing overall a good job with the lines and drawing the curves confidently! But a few things:

1.You aren't drawing through the forms completely, make sure you always draw a full solid shape for each sausage.

2.Some of the sausages you are drawing are way too squished, try to make them more simple, here are some examples for how to draw them through completely and to make them less squished.

3Your shadows are sticking to the forms, check this Try to imagine the forms as if they were sausages on your table and you had a lamp on top, they should be casting bigger shadows. Some examples on your own work

Here are some corrections, hopefully it makes it a bit easier to understand:

Now in your animal drawings largely you're doing a good job drawing them solidly, though they have some issues.

The birds are pretty well done, but on the others you aren't applying the sausage method for legs consistently, you sometimes draw sausage-like forms, other times you draw cylinders, others 2d shapes. In general uncomfortable wants you to always apply the sausage method, just like on the organic intersections exercise.

I'll give you one example with one of your drawings and then I'll ask you to do two more to see if you understood it correctly, here it is! Pay attention that I drew intersections between sausages which is something you sometimes missed, so make sure you do it on the new drawing.

So like I said I want you to do two more drawings, make sure they are a four legged animal like a cow, elephant, rhino, whatever that you can apply this sausage method I explained. Good luck and keep up the good work!

Next Steps:

2 more animal drawings as requested

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:04 AM, Monday November 21st 2022

Thank you for the patience, I finally just got this finished here: https://imgur.com/a/LbkhDoP

6:23 PM, Tuesday November 29th 2022

Hello! You did a good job, but there are some issues. I made a video explaining the issues so hopefully it's a bit easier to understand. Let me know if you have trouble watching it or can't understand something or anything like that.

So before moving on I want you to do 2 more pages of animals the same way as on the previous one, keeping in mind the things I said on the video:

-drawing through everything

-adding simple additional forms and not complex ones

-starting with the initial forms as explained on the demo

-connecting every form with other form with intersections and drawing through them

-paying attention to the size of the sausages of the sausage method, so they're consistent.

I also want you to use pictures of animals on which you can see the legs fully and they aren't covered by grass or anything, that'll make it easier for you as well.

That being said, good luck and keep up the good work! Make sure to ask if there's something you don't understand.

Next Steps:

2 more animal drawings as requested

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:37 PM, Monday December 5th 2022

I have given the link for the rivsion for the other one who did the critique down below.

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