Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
1:25 PM, Saturday May 23rd 2020
Hi. I'm submitting this for the official critique. Thanks :D
Hey there victor. Good job on finishing lesson 1. I'll be your TA going over your work today so let's get to it.
Starting with your super imposed lines you are doing a good job driving the motion from your shoulder and producing confident, swift marks. At this point it's just about practicing this exercise to try and get the groupings tighter but this is a great start and focused on the importance of flow over accuracy. Likewise, your ghosted lines are swift and confident and you're doing a good job keeping your shoulder engaged and producing confident marks.
Your ellipses are also looking very confident. They are smooth, drawn through correctly, and there aren't any flat areas or sharp corners. You are doing a good job with your tables exercise on keeping your ellipses uniform and packed tightly to eliminate any sense of ambiguity. Your ellipses in planes are a little shakier. Remember that the key here is to try and make contact with all 4 edges and there are some areas where you are missing the mark. Make sure you're ghosting enough times to get a good feel for this. Your funnels exercise shows you are understanding how to align your minor axes to the funnel axes and you keep things confident here as well.
Your rough perspective boxes are getting a little less confident, which isn't abnormal for students as you move from abstract exercises to drawing actual things. Remember that each line is a unit of work or effort involving adequate planning, ghosting, etc. So a box should take 12 times as much time and work as a single line. So make sure you are ghosting and planning every line before executing just like you did on your ghosted lines exercisee. Your boxes themselves have a bit of skewing going on because you aren't always keping your vertical lines perpendicular to the horizon but you are doing pretty well keeping your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon. Your converging lines are right on track and as you get more practice drawing towards far off vanishing points your accuracy and feel for these types of lines will improve.
Moving on to your rotated boxes, you seem to have gotten a bit overwhelmed here. You did manage to push through and take it to completion though which is our only goal for students so that you can be exposed to new types of spatial problems and solution methods so good job. There are some things I'd like to point out though. First off, your hatching is very messy. When hatching is messy it does more harm than good as it can very easily add visual clutter. Remember that for our purposes hatching should be composed of parallel lines only with no cross hatching as the purpose here is to clearly delineate planes form one another. You did do a good job of keeping your boxes packed tightly together so you could properly leverage adjacent lines as perspective guides so good job there. In terms of rotation you weren't exactly rotating your boxes but rather skewing them over so give this gif another view and study how the rotation is driven by the motion of the vanishing points. Overall though a good start.
Finally let's look at your organic perspective. Your compositions have a lot of good motion and depth to them. You are overlapping your forms to indicate to the viewer's brain that these forms occupy the same space which does a lot for conveying the three dimensionality of your space on a sheet of paper. Your lines are very scratchy here and seeming to lack any sort of ghosting or planning compared to previous line work so take a deep breath and take your time for each lines. You have a good exploration of space here with a clear distinction of fore, mid, and background indicated by the scaling of your boxes which further pushes the illusion of three dimensional space on your paper.
Overall this is not a bad start and I'll be marking your lesson as complete. As you move on to the box challenge make sure you are taking more time preparing and ghosting each line. Keep up the good work and we'll see you next time.
250 box challenge.