I submitted this for unofficial critique a while ago and they said i had some problems, so here is the second album for organic and rough perspective: https://imgur.com/a/UfEAcTl.
Welcome to drawabox, and congrats on making it past the hurdle that is Lesson 1. Let’s see how you did, shall we?
Starting off, your superimposed lines look good. They’re smooth, properly lined up at the start, and of a consistent trajectory. Your ghosted lines start off a little rough, but improve immensely once you reach the ghosted planes exercise.
The table of ellipses exercise is mostly good. It’s a little hard to judge the rotations, because it seems as though you’re making a lot of accidental contact with the paper as you ghost (be deliberate about your movements!), but their smoothness/roundness is on point. Just be careful that you’re not flicking your pen off the page at the end of your rotations – lift it off, instead. The ellipses in planes start to show some insecurity – they’re both wobbly, and bumpy – so I’ll quickly remind you that the goal isn’t for them to be a snug fit inside of their frames, but rather for them to be smooth, and rounded, so draw with that in mind. Your funnels look good, if drawn through a little much. Resist the urge to just make an ellipse thicker when you see it going wrong. Forgetting that a mistake exists is the worst thing you can do – instead, have it always stare you in the face, so you know what to work on.
The plotted perspective exercise looks clean, but you should’ve used a ruler for your hatching lines.
The rough perspective exercise looks good. Its convergences start off strong, and show some decent improvement throughout the set (save for at the end, but I’ll just go ahead and assume that this was a different day), but its line-work is a little rough. There’s 2 issues here. The first is confidence, and for it, you need to remind yourself that, though the big picture is different, there’s no difference between these lines, and the ones in the ghosted lines/planes exercises. If they could be confident there, why not here, too? The second is automatic reinforcing, and this is goes back to what I said earlier about mistakes. They’re fine, unless you try to hide them. Then they’re not, because in so doing, you do yourself a disservice.
The rotated boxes exercise has this issue, too, but I suppose I won’t keep mentioning it – just know that it’s never okay. As for the exercise itself, it’s well done. The boxes do a solid job of rotating up front (less so in the back, but that’s expected), and you’ve done a good job of keeping them snug against each other.
Finally, the organic perspective exercise is well done. The size of your boxes is, at times, a little off, but their foreshortening is shallow, and consistent, so they do a good job of flowing through their respective compositions, anyway.
Next Steps:
I’d not request any revisions for this submission, so I’ve not looked at the extras. Instead, I’ve marked this as complete, so you can move on to the box challenge. Good luck!
This is a remarkable little pen. Technically speaking, any brush pen of reasonable quality will do, but I'm especially fond of this one. It's incredibly difficult to draw with (especially at first) due to how much your stroke varies based on how much pressure you apply, and how you use it - but at the same time despite this frustration, it's also incredibly fun.
Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.
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