12:02 PM, Friday February 11th 2022
Hello i am Doctormein and i'll be critiquing your work for today.
Arrows.
Your arrow look so far so good and felt believable, However it seem like you forgot add Shading and line weight like the step provided here. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4 so please make sure to do so.
Organic form with contour curve , Ellipses.
This exercise need quite a bit of help.
First and foremost You're not drawing through your ellipses. ALWAYS remember to draw through your ellipses 2 - 3 times for the entire course.
Secondly When drawing the ellipses or contour curve. ALWAYS keep in mind how they turn in space. If you forgot how ellipses will look when turned in space i recommend referring back to this step in organic form. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/ellipses I've also made diagram regarding this issue too which i'll provide here. https://imgur.com/a/3Q0mP2O Right now you're drawing ellipses and contour curve with the same degree. Which will make the form felt flat and unconvincing
Finally Quite a bit of form you've drawn is actually more like ellipses rather than a sausages form. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/simplesausage try to keep your form simple will certainly help it being perceived as 3d more easily.
Texture Analysis
When you attempted to draw texture Try to think of Cast shadow & Shapes rather than outlines and lines. Since this will give you a much better deal of control when you wish to lower the detail density.
And when you're drawing smaller form (tiny rocks or something that change surface topology.) Try not to enclose form entirely, But rather leave some opening https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/drawingforms
Dissections
As previously mentioned in texture analysis. all of them can be applied here
and try to make the texture curve more around the curve would be great too.
I am sorry to sound harsh but the crystal and mushroom you've drawn. In my opinion doesn't seem like a texture but more like a seperate entity which construction should be applied
Form intersection
The main goal of this exercise is not about intersection but to try to draw the form that felt like it belong to the same scene.
So i'll be critiquing mainly on that
Firstly A large margin of form you've drawn is being stretched which is not ideal for this exercise since it will distract you from the true intent of the exercise.
Secondly You're drawing group of form rather than one big overlapping group. you should draw the form overlapping and interconnecting even if it look visually confusing
And i think lastly. You're using pencil to draw the hatching and some intersection. If you have pen and ink the work should always be done in pen and ink if possible since it will taught the content of lesson being taught here better.
And additionally the ellipses you've drawn in this exercise is not being drawn 2-3 time so please refer back to organic form section i've critiqued
Organic intersections
This exercise is.. pretty hard to do. But there's glaring mistake you tend to make here and there so i'll point it out for you.
(The mistake you made is mostly from organic form mistake so please refer back to that again.)
when drawing organic form you should always draw the contour curve AROUND the form. If you're drawing contour curve like what you've done in the exercise the shape will be perceived as flat rather than 3d
Secondly drawing througn your form is an essential part to understanding 3d! This applied too with the contour curve and ellipses if a form is being blocked by another form always draw them through!
Thirdly you are using complicated form rather than a simple form. This most likely happen because of organic form exercise so i recommend doing that as warmup a ton.
Next Steps:
I am sorry but i would need an additional pages for nearly all of the exercise focusing on what i've critiqued
And ALWAYS ALWAYS check the instruction and follow them RELIGIOUSLY.
2 Pages of Organic form (1 Ellipses 1 Contour curve.)
3 Pages of form intersections
2 Pages of Organic intersection
If you haven't got your 250 boxes and lesson 1 critiqued yet I highly recommend to get that done first before moving on to this lesson.