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9:39 AM, Sunday August 2nd 2020

General feedback - It seems like you are rushing through the exercises and homeworks. You are reproducing some common mistakes that can easily be avoided. I think you could gain and learn a lot by just taking more time per each exercise, reviewing the common mistakes sections and focusing on applying those learnings.

It also seems like you "give up" on some exercises, and just stop them midway. Failing to complete these basic exercises will make your next lessons even harder.

Organic Arrows - You draw a lot of arrows in the same way. The "flat-wavy" kind. I would try to experiment more with this. You also leave a lot of arrows unfinished, and you even cross some out as mistakes. Doing this doesn't mean you completed 2 pages or homework. It means you completed 1 and a half.

And even if a mistake happens when you are drawing an arrow, work through it. That's how you'll learn.

Organic Forms - Some of your sausages are distorted. Remember, there's a list of things you should avoid in the homework explanation. These include:

Ends of different sizes

Roundedness on the ends that stretches farther than the size of a sphere

Midsections that swell or pinch

This is much more visible in your contour curves exercise.

Texture Analysis - You didn't complete this exercise. You only filled out 10% of the third box in each row. There should be a smooth transition across the whole box and only the final 10% section should be fully white.

Texture Dissections - For this exercise you still need to fill the page with sausages, not just draw one large sausage to avoid doing many textures. Please redo this exercise with 2 pages of at least 5 sausages on each page.

Form Intersections - Your lines are a bit wobbly on your forms(especially on your boxes). Maybe practice the ghosting method exercise from lesson 1 a bit more. You should execute your lines quickly with confidence. Also try to go over all the lines that are visible again with a liner to make them a bit thicker. You do this but only partly, it's suggested in the exercise to do it and it will improve the visual understanding of the intersections. I'd also add hatched lines to the faces of forms that face the viewer.

Organic Intersections - Organic intersections seem fine. There is only one distorted sausage on DSC_0253(the one on the top right of the pile), and it's placed unnaturally. That's fine though, it's expected to make some errors. My only issue with this exercise is you redrew some lines several times. For example some of the sausage contour curves you draw to give them shape are drawn with 3-5 lines. Stick with one line for these things. Only for full elipses should you do 2 passes.

Next Steps:

Please redo the following exercises:

2 pages of organic arrows

New texture analysis without hatched lines and with the 3rd box filled in properly

2 pages of texture dissections with 5 sausages per page

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:11 AM, Wednesday August 12th 2020

Thanks for the critique. Here is the correction. On the third picture that mess is blood because I accidentally cut my finger while drawing, so don't get it wrong I didn't try to experiment with colours or eat my lunch on the paper.

https://drive.google.com/drive/u/1/folders/1Y7nfAlX8laDSFVpQMs3Uodc9fkqoCRJp

5:14 PM, Wednesday August 12th 2020

The drive is locked. Please make it shareable so I could open it, or rehost to imgur :)

9:15 AM, Friday August 14th 2020
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