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3:30 PM, Friday December 11th 2020

Hi there! I'd say good work overall! I just finished lesson 6 too and am working on the wheels. I haven't gotten any feedback so I'm not sure if I'm the beset person to give you feedback but I'll try.

First, the good:

I think your form intersections are really good! For the most part I can tell that you really thought through how forms would intersect. This was a difficult one for me but I think you did a good job.

Your wii remote looks really good! Very convincing 3d forms. I like how you built up the different parts of the remote. Very nice. Also, clevery use of subdividing on the extension cord. It seems like it maybe got a bit tedious but you stuck with it. Your lines seem to be consistent with the vanishing points of the overall box and that is really tough. Nice work!

Form intersections:

Pretty good! I think the drawing over lines and some of the hatching can be a bit distracting, but overall it seems like you are capable of visualizing how forms interact with each other. A few of the cylinders into spheres seem a bit off, but those are really tough. I wouldn't do it over but just keep thinking about it. One noticeable mistake was I think page three of the intersections where a cone intersects with a sphere on the left side looks noticeably off. However there is a sphere and a cylinder above it that look good! (both on left side of page).

Everyday objects:

I think you maybe could have done a little more subdividing. For the perfume bottle, for example, your front plane looks good. On your left "plane" however, how did you get the placement for the internal vertical lines? It looks like guesswork and I think the lesson wanted to avoid that as much as possible. Maybe watch the bluetooth demo again if you are curious. Another place you could have practiced this is on the wii remote. I think you could have drawn a line on the right hand side to make the d pad, and then flipped it using the methods talked about in this lesson to see where the left side of the d pad should be.

I would also encourage you to continue to be aware of how these different 3d shapes fit together. I think on the coffee mug you had a good opportunity to make sure the handle follows along the same vanishing points as the mug but it misses it. Compare especially the top part of the handle to the top part of the mug (assuming that the handle top and mug top are parallel in real life). Also, again on the mug you missed a chance to flip where the handle attaches to the mug across the center line. Also also, I think in general keep practicing your boxes. I think that your mug does not look like a convincing box.

One other thing is to continue to be mindful of your cylinders. One thing that is really helpful for me is to rely pretty heavily on the center line because I know that the center line should cut the ellipse in half pretty equally (if I'm remembering correctly).

Sorry for all the negatives! I can tell you put in a lot of work, this homework was really difficult and confusing for me with all the subdividing and flipping lines, but I think you did well!

Next Steps:

I would maybe do one more item, perhaps something boxier to practice transposing lines over the middle or around corners. Maybe like a toaster or other small appliance? When you do your tires, maybe do like two boxes a day. Boxes are something I really need to work on and it's helpful to do a couple warm ups each day.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:00 PM, Friday December 11th 2020

Thank you for the helpful critique! I will take into account what you said!

8:40 PM, Friday December 11th 2020

I did another object another perfume bottle i tried to keep in mind what you said and avoid guess work. I re-watched the speaker demo and realized what I was doing wrong. Feel free to check that out in my sketch book. thanks again.

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