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11:12 PM, Sunday March 8th 2020

Hey there, TA Meta here to look over your work so let's get started.

Beginning with your superimposed lines, you've done a good job lining your pen up with the starting point to limit fraying to one end of the line. That said, you do seem overly preoccupied with accuracy here, and instead of allowing your line to follow its trajectory to the end, you course-correct back to the guideline, resulting in an accurate but wobbly line. Remember that in Drawabox we prioritise confident linework over accuracy, since the latter comes with practice.

Next, your ghosted lines and planes are looking straight and confident. There was some minor arcing in the lines however this pretty much cleared up in the ghosted planes, so it's just something to be aware of.

Onto your tables of ellipses which are again looking nice and confident. It's good to see you've packed as many ellipses in there as possible and placed them up against one another. Something I noticed throughout your ellipse section is that the weight of your line is a little more faded and "scratchy" than your lines, possibly due to you using the side of your pen to draw these. Try to keep your pen close to a 90 degree angle to the paper because you risk damaging the tip by drawing on the side.

Next, your ellipses in planes are showing no signs of preoccupation with accuracy, which is what we like to see. Instead, your ellipses are confident and they hit the four sides of the plane most of the time - accuracy in this exercise, as with the others, will come with time and mileage as you practice these exercises in your warm-ups.

Finally, your funnels are looking pretty good. You've done a good job aligning the ellipses to the minor axis on the top right one and for the most part on your other funnels. You did get a little bit loose with the spacing on these so make sure you work on tightening this up.

Next to your rough perspective which is looking really good. There isn't too much of a drop in confidence here - though there is a little - and you've done a good job keeping your horizontals parallel and verticals perpendicular to the horizon line. I did notice some instances of correcting your lines as well as line weight that was not applied as confidently as it should have been. Try to break the habit of automatically correcting yourself, as each and every one of our lines should be planned and drawn with confidence, with the same applying to your application of line weight. I'm not seeing anything out of the ordinary in terms of your convergences, your boxes closer to the vanishing point tend to be far more accurate than those further away.

Your rotated boxes are looking pretty good - you've done a good job of keeping the gaps between your boxes tight and consistent. There is a little bit of rotation here but it seems mostly limited to the first layer of the boxes, the rest instead tend to follow the same vanishing point rather than sliding along the axis/horizon line. I also noticed some of your lines got a little scratchy as well - as previously noted, every line should be planned and drawn with confidence.

Finally your organic perspective compositions are quite interesting, you've conveyed a good amount of depth in the scenes through a combination of overlapping your boxes and varying up their size. There is some divergence present in your boxes but this is something you will be able to work on in the box challenge. Your lines here are looking well planned and confident, which is something you should take forward with you, though the notes about not automatically correcting and applying line weight still stand.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto the 250 box challenge.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
11:07 AM, Monday March 9th 2020

Hi, thank you so much for the feedback, I really apprciate they breadth and depth.

Regarding next steps, can I move onto Lesson 2, or is the box challange a prerequisite for it?

12:17 PM, Monday March 9th 2020

The box challenge is a pre-requisite for lesson 2. Though if you feel you absolutely cannot wait to start lesson 2, then make sure your box challenge is complete and critiqued before you tackle form intersections.

5:06 PM, Monday March 9th 2020

Here is the link for the 250 box challenge I did 2 years ago. Do you think I need to re-do it?

https://photos.app.goo.gl/hDZlRhnIZhnfwFaI2

Thanks!

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