Hello, my fellow Random_Broke_Arteest! I'm Flippy, and I will be critiquing your submission today. Let's get right into it!
Superimposed Lines
Your first page of lines looks very good. There's a bit of curvature to some of your lines, but it is minimal, so don't worry about this. It will decrease with milage.
On your second page, the longest of your lines have some wobbling. This could be a case of not drawing from your shoulder. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/2/pivots It could also be that you are drawing them too slowly, giving yourself the opportunity to correct your the line's trajectory by eye.
A final point I'll make here is that some of your lines don't begin from the same point as the starting line, causing fraying on both ends. Remember to take your time when beginning your stroke, aligning it to the same starting point as the previous strokes. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/fraying
Ghosted Lines
Your ghosted lines look good. There are some instances of undershooting/overshooting, but it's nothing too major. Keep the information in the aforementioned links in mind, and your lines will continue to improve.
Ghosted Plains
It appears you were a bit confused as to which points to connect your lines to. Just remember that the plains should end up looking like simple squares with Xs connecting all four corners, no matter how distorted the plain becomes. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/11/step3 The majority of your lines drawn, however, look good.
Ellipses in Plains
Your ellipses look very well placed and evenly shaped, for the most part, with a few becoming distorted. My only advice here is that you cut down on the number of passes on your ellipse, drawing through them only 2-3 times. This will help clean them up further, as the overlapping passes become tighter.
Funnels
Again, very good job in placing the ellipses here. They fit nicely into the confines of the curved lines.
There is one example of your ellipses coming unaligned with your center line/minor axis, but I can see the real issue was with the center line/minor axis being off centered in the first place. It happens to me too.
I like how you experimented with different sizes of ellipses. In the future, I'd encourage you (though this is optional) to try putting more emphasis on the shift in degrees of the ellipses, starting very narrow in the middle, and increasing the degree as you move towards the ends of the curves, ending with close to a full circle. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step3
Tables of Ellipses
On the first page, your ellipses look good. They look well placed, and symmetrical, like they would divide nicely into two even halves.
On the second page, they still look good, however, there are larger gaps between some, and it appears you've drawn through certain of them only one time, while for others, you've drawn through more than three times. I know I already mentioned this, but just try to keep the number of passes between 2-3 times (two, preferably, and three at maximum). https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/12/drawingthrough
Plotted Perspective
I see a lot of extra lines at first, and I'm unsure of their intended purpose. It could be that you were getting confused or lost in all of the overlaps and lines converging towards the vanishing points. This is understandable. Your boxes themselves, however, look fine, and there are fewer instances of unnecessary lines on the third panel.
Try puting thicker line weight on the outer lines, that make up the silhouette, rather than the inner lines. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step8
Hatching, in the context of this course, is used to define the plain that is closest to us. You used it correctly for the majority of the boxes, but there is at least one drawn incorrectly. (I'm looking at the rightmost box on the third panel.) I just thought I'd point that out. For the most part though, hatching is optional.
Rough Perspective
Some of your angles came quite close to their intended targets, while others were far off. This is expected when starting out, and your ability to make educated guesses concerning perspective will improve in time.
Some of your lines are beginning to wobble/curve again. Always remember to take your time and ghost through them. This applies to the course as a whole.
Keep in mind that, in one point perspective, all width lines are horizontal. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/6/infinity
Rotated Boxes
Now, let me first say that this exercise is supposed to be difficult, and you did an excellent job with it.
The whole point of the exercise is to observe the angles of neighboring boxes to then make educated guesses of the next stage of rotation. You did great with this. All I can say here is to keep at it, sharpening your understanding of objects in relative space. Good work!
Organic Perspective
Great job conveying depth by varying the sizes of your boxes. This is especially noticeable on your second page, as you made greater use of overlapping boxes.
Always remember that boxes consist of three sets of four parallel lines, which converge to their own vanishing points. https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/bef4343d.jpg You will learn more about this in the 250 Box Challenge.
As a final note, I noticed that you redrew some of your lines in these exercises. Please refrain from doing this in the future. I know it is difficult to resist the urge to correct our mistakes, especially when we know we could have done better, (I still struggle with this myself!) but it's for the best we draw the line, then move on, regardless of how good or bad the result. Allowing ourselves to redraw a line disincentivize us to draw it properly the first time. Don't worry too much about it though, there will always be another line for you to draw with the best of your ability.
And that concludes the critique! I think you did a great job with the first lesson, and I am confident that you are ready to move on to the 250 Box challenge!
Key points to remember:
Draw through ellipses 2-3 times (two, preferably, three at max)
Boxes consist of 3 sets of 4 parallel lines
Do not redraw lines
And, as always, prioritize confidence over accuracy
I won't request any revisions, but just remember do the exercises learned in lesson 1 from time to time, as warm ups, to keep your skills sharp!
Next Steps:
As a next step...
You will be moving on to the 250 Box Challenge, where you will both further your understanding of working with vanishing points, as well as develop your ability to rotate boxes in 3D space intuitively.
A tip going into the 250 Box Challenge: Posting a page of boxes every now and then on the Drawabox Discord is a great way to correct any mistakes early on.
If you have any questions, feel free to ask in a reply right here, or on the Discord.
Good luck!
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The reason I hold this book in such high esteem is because of how it puts the relatively new field of game art into perspective, showing how concept art really just started off as crude sketches intended to communicate ideas to storytellers, designers and 3D modelers. How all of this focus on beautiful illustrations is really secondary to the core of a concept artist's job. A real eye-opener.
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