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10:09 PM, Tuesday November 15th 2022

Hey there! I'll be reviewing your Lesson 2 submission.

Organic Arrows: These arrows look pretty confident. There are a few things you can continue to work on. Keep track of where you place your hatching. On many of your arrows, they are very inconsistent, sometimes falling in areas where hatching isn't necessary. One thing to keep in mind is that hatching is supposed the represent the shadow of the part of the arrow crossing over itself. If one part has another part overlapping it, the part being overlapped needs the hatching. I would recommend practicing this as a warm up.

Organic Forms with Contours: You seem to understand how ellipses and contour lines should be drawn, but not how they conform inside the sausage. In several instances, the ellipses are drawn with similar degrees, which wouldn't accurate represent what it would look like to cut through one of these sausages. The contour lines are a little better, but they still run into the same problem of having similar degrees. One thing I noticed is that your sausages are either elongates or sharply curved. In Uncomfortable's lesson, he wanted us to draw sausages that were equal length throughout so we could better understand how to draw the ellipses. Click this to see what I'm talking about, as well as what is not recommended. I would recommend redoing one sheet of organic forms with contours, but mostly focusing on redoing the ellipses section. I think the contour lines can be practiced with during warm ups.

Texture Analysis: Well done on this section. You managed to capture the shadows well implicitly. The only thing I'll add is to make sure that the dark side blends in smoothly. You managed to do this with the paper texture and the bark texture, but the cheese texture could be a little smoother in the transition.

Dissections: These were excellently done. You not only continued to convey textures implicitly, but you allowed them to pop off the sausage to make them feel more 3D. I have nothing more to add.

Form Intersections: You did well in drawing the shapes confidently, as well as with your intersections. There were a few places where you struggled, but overall, you grasped how the forms interact with each other. One thing I'll add that only popped up once in your drawings: make sure to only hatch the bottom part of the cone and not the rest of its surface.

Organic Intersections: Once again, good forms on all of these. The contours look well-placed and sell the idea that they are 3D. The sausages also seem to conform well to each other. None look stiff or out-of-place. (There was that one sausage on the second page, but it's alright.) Plus, the shadows were placed well. You kept in mind what surface they were falling on and made sure to convey that.

Overall, nicely done. I would like for you to redo the organic forms with contour ellipses for one more page before I approve you to move on.

Next Steps:

One page of organic forms with contour ellipses

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
10:52 PM, Friday November 25th 2022

Hi, sorry to bother, but it's been over a week. Would you care to check out my revisions? Thanks!

5:51 AM, Saturday November 26th 2022

Sure! Send them other. It is no bother at all.

2:28 PM, Saturday November 26th 2022

Already sent them, it's the reply just above this one, can you see it?

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