i had a hard time with arrows for some reason.
texture studies were realy hard but i think i kinda got it towards the end. i still.need to do a few hundred more before i get comfortable with them but i feel.i learned a bit.
anyways any advice and critique are very much so welcome.
Arrows
They flow pretty well, but they have a few issues:
-Lines get a bit wobbly at times. Don't forget that just like in the line exercises in lesson 1, you should be focusing on confidence over accuracy at all times.
-Second issue I see is that they're mainly flowing through 2d space, not 3d; to make the illusion of the arrows going towards the viewer in the page, you need to make the arrow as well as the space between folds of the arrow grow bigger and bigger as it gets closer to the viewer.
-Third is about lineweight. Just like with normal lines, you should ghost them, and draw them confidently, as you did on the superimposed lines exercise. Accuracy is secondary here as well. Hatching looks a bit rushed too, don't forget to do your best on each line.
Organic forms
About the organic forms, they're pretty confident, but they have some issues as well:
-Most important one is about the specific form we're aiming for, it has to be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width.. Some of yours are more like stretched ellipses, others bulge a bit, and in others the tube waves a bit.
-The ellipses in general are good, you're varying their degrees well, but you're having trouble alligning them to the minor axis (the spine of the organic forms) Don't forget that that line acts like the minor axis on the funnels exercise; it has to cut the ellipses in 2 identical halves.
-Lastly, on the organic forms with curves, you have some curves that aren't hooking, careful with that too.
Textures
Here you've done a pretty good job in general. The texture analysis looks great, with the only nitpick that the transitions on the first and second gradients from black could have been a bit more seamless.
The dissections are pretty well done as well, and the only thing I can catch here is that you're having a bit of trouble wrapping the textures around some organic forms, as in the roop texture, so try to keep an eye on that.
And in general, a thing you're not having much trouble with is drawing lines instead of shadow shapes, but in the case of the really small shadows, you tend to use lines directly to copy them which can make you lose track of the actual shadow shapes. This is something that helps with it. Try to use this technique, no matter how small the shadow shapes are.
Form intersections
You've done a pretty good job at maintaining a consistent foreshortening through all of your forms, but I've found a few issues:
-As explained on the exercise section, try to stick to equilateral forms, that is, not drawing boxes that are long in only one dimension.
-Second thing is that I think you're overdoing lineweight at it. Try to keep it to just one superimposed line, no more. It doesn't matter if that line is off, just move on to the next thing.
Organic intersections
They look pretty solid in general, but here as well remember you should stick to the simple forms I mentioned on the organic forms section. Some of the forms on this exercise are pretty long and complex.
-In general the shadows run well across the forms they're being casted on, though there are a few times that the forms stick to the form that casts them, so just in case, take a look at this..
I also think you might have started adding shadows before finishing drawing all of the forms. Just in case this is what happened, don't forget that you should only start adding lineweight and shadows after you finished drawing all the forms. I recommend rewatching the video demo if you still have doubts, as the process is explained there well.
Before moving on, I want to see 1 page of arrows, 1 page of organic forms with contour ellipses, and 1 page of organic intersections, because I want to make sure you understand the things I mentioned. Good luck and keep it up!
Next Steps:
-1 page of arrows
-1 page of organic forms with contour ellipses
-1 page of form intersections.
Hi Elodin,
Thanks for the great review, it helped me more than you know... i didnt realize how much having your work reviewed helped not only to see mistakes but to feel motivated... so really, thank you :)
Here are the revisions you asked for https://imgur.com/a/u087Kci , i still seem to struggle with arrows, i understand the concept but im not able to both draw confidently and feel the 3D space at the same time. If i slow down i get wobbly but i feel volume better, if i rush it gets flatter but lines work improves (i still try to focus on fluidity even if my volume suffers from it).
That's much better! Arrows now are coming closer to the viewer in most cases. It's easy to lose track of the lines and start having wobbly lines while you're starting with the exercise, something that can help is to break them dow into steps.
To do this, you can add a dot for each part where a fold should be. This way, when you're ghosting you only have to follow the dots you already placed. Like here (Sorry for the lines, I did them with my mouse lol).
The organic forms look great, there's only one where one end came out a bit wrong (the center bottom one), but the others are pretty good.
And the organic intersections look much better too as well. Only thing you need to be careful is that you got some sausages that look like their weight isn't being supported. Don't forget you need to draw them on their final position, so if they are going to look like they're going to fall, think and try again until they feel supported.
Overall pretty good job so I'm marking this as complete. I'll try to get to your lesson 3 critique as soon as I can so you can keep going, good luck!
Hi, Thanks.
That arrows advice seems genius, i will try it out.
i may or may not have already started with lesson 4 demos, but ill slow down and wait for your review.
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