Hello, Lylm! I've broken down the critique below.
Lines
Superimposed Lines: Looking pretty good. In the longest lines, though, some of the lines tend to arch. Counter this by ensuring you’re drawing from your shoulder (elbow shouldn’t be resting on the table) and, if that doesn’t work, consciously arching the lines in the opposite direction.
Ghosted Lines: Looking good. Slight wobbles but nothing major.
Ghosted Planes: Good.
Ellipses:
Tables of Ellipses: The ellipses are wobbly and slightly deformed. While most of them fit nicely in the frames, aim for confidence of accuracy in this lesson. Ghost through the ellipses, then draw through them swiftly with no hesitation.
Ellipses in Planes: The ellipses here are wobbly and slightly deformed here as well; some of them have only been drawn through 1 ½ times.
Funnels Exercise: The minor axis is positioned well with the ellipses. However, the ellipses are shaky here as well.
Boxes:
Plotted Perspective: Looks pretty good. The boxes would benefit from additional lineweight added to the silhouettes, to distinguish them from the lines going back to the vanishing points. In addition, adding hatching to one of the front faces of each box would further the illusion of perspective.
Rough Perspective: Pretty good. Remember that the horizontal lines of the boxes should run parallel to the horizon line.
Rotated Boxes: The hatching between the boxes is a bit messy and loose and there is no hatching on the bottom of the second box to the left. Some of the corner boxes have been drawn over more than once–try to avoid that in the future.
Organic Perspective: Don’t worry too much about perspective, there’ll be a chance to practice in the 250 box challenge. The boxes furthest from the viewer appear to be the same size, which breaks the illusion of perspective. When drawing the swoopy line, use lineweight to your advantage, adding more weight where the line is closest to the viewer; also, keep them simple so the frames don’t get cluttered (page 2, frame 2).
Hope this was helpful!
Next Steps:
1 page of Tables of Ellipses: In the first half of the page, the frames should be plain with no waves cutting through them. Remember to ghost, then draw through your ellipses 2-3 times, without hesitation.
1 page of Organic Perspective: Add extra lineweight to the front and keep the swoopy line simple--no extra swirls or extreme curves.
Is that better? I'm trying to be confident with my ellipses and I'm struggling to get different lineweights with my fineliner.
Thank you so much for your critique Abeanberry!
Much better! The lineweight in the swoops looks fine to me and the ellipses look good as well - tighter and more confident.
Next Steps:
I believe you are ready to move on to the 250 Box Challenge!
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