Here are my revisions https://imgur.com/a/VUJY5lr
On this plant (https://imgur.com/XLQINqO) I spent about 1 hour on it but included my warm up time on the paper by mistake,
Thank you for the critique
Starting with your branches, while you were more attentive to extending your edge segments fully halfway to the next ellipse, I'm getting the impression that you may have only relied on what was mentioned in the feedback, rather than checking the instructions I linked you to. Reason being, while you corrected that issue, you introduced another.
The instructions show that each segment starts at one ellipse, continues past the second, and stops halfway to the third, with the next segment starting at the previous ellipse and repeating the same pattern from there. You were doing this second part correctly before, but this time started having your segments start roughly where the previous one ended, either minimizing or eliminating that important overlap.
I'm also not seeing consistent shifting in the degrees, and while you are drawing through your ellipses more than before, it's still not two full times. This last point isn't a huge concern (and certainly something you'd be able to just work on as you continue forwards), but together with the other points it does raise the issue that the manner in which you're approaching the feedback you receive is unfortunately not adequate, and you'll want to reflect upon why that is.
Continuing onto your plant constructions, there are a few other notable issues I'm noticing:
Here you opted to draw the branches as lines, rather than forms. Unfortunately this is not something you should be doing in this course - a line is just a line, but it doesn't enclose volume, and thus cannot convey a solid, 3D structure on its own. I understand that these were very thin when drawing the entire structure, but in such cases it's important that you draw those branches with two edges, enclosing space between them. In other words, use the branches technique.
On this drawing, when adding the edge detail to your petals, you fall back to zigzagging that edge detail back and forth, which is specifically addressed in these notes. This results in a weak relationship between the various phases of construction.
Next Steps:
Please complete the same revisions again, though beforehand, take some time to reflect on why your new work deviated from the instructions in this manner.
Here are my revisions, This time I have taken much more time to read the content and critiques to better understand. Thank you
Overall this is progressing in the right direction. I do however encourage you to review my past feedback as you continue forwards, as you are still missing some small elements - like the point about including another ellipse inset within the opening of a flower pot to establish the thickness of the rim.
I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Move onto Lesson 4.
Here we're getting into the subjective - Gerald Brom is one of my favourite artists (and a pretty fantastic novelist!). That said, if I recommended art books just for the beautiful images contained therein, my list of recommendations would be miles long.
The reason this book is close to my heart is because of its introduction, where Brom goes explains in detail just how he went from being an army brat to one of the most highly respected dark fantasy artists in the world today. I believe that one's work is flavoured by their life's experiences, and discovering the roots from which other artists hail can help give one perspective on their own beginnings, and perhaps their eventual destination as well.
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