Great job completing lesson 1!
I can see that you worked hard and that you improved in a lot of areas! For your super-imposed lines I can see you tried to execute your marks with confidence and a lot of your lines came out fairly straight. Looking at your ghosted lines, you did pretty well. Some of your lines have a little wobbling but many are straight and appear more confident. There are a few ghosted lines that look like you tried to correct them part way through. Something to keep in mind when working on Drawabox; once your pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid mistakes has passed, so all you can really do is push through. Hesitation serves no purpose. Mistakes happen, but a smooth, confident mark is still useful even if it's a little off. You do improve on this a lot in your planes homework. Your lines are much smoother and more confident looking. It looks like you were careful in your construction and these planes look good overall. I do notice that you have a few lines that arch. So I suggest you read this section of the ghosted ;lines homework here to improve on that.
It looks like you struggled a bit with your ellipses at first but I can also see by the end that you improved on them. Starting with your tables of ellipses I see that you struggled with keeping your ellipses evenly shaped and confident. I see much of the same when I look at your ellipses in planes. When drawing your ellipses it is important to utilize the ghosting method properly. The ghosting method allows us to break the process down into multiple steps, first planning and preparing, and investing all of our time there, before relying on our muscle memory to take us the rest of the way as we execute the mark. It is also important to make sure that you are using your shoulder when using the ghosting method, which you can read more about here. If you are having trouble understanding how to draw from the shoulder you can also watch this video by Uncomfortable. This should help you improve on your ellipses as you continue to do them in your warm ups. Your ellipses do look better in your funnels homework. I can see that the shape of your ellipses is becoming more evenly shaped and confident. There is still some wobble and hesitation but if you keep in mind what I said here you should be able to improve on that in your warm ups.
Moving onto your rough perspective boxes I can see that you tried to place your boxes correctly. Many of your horizontal lines appear to stay parallel with the horizon and your vertical lines perpendicular. I also noticed that your line quality dips a bit here when compared to your planes homework. Keep in mind as you progress through Drawabox and begin to construct more complex forms that it is important to put in the time and focus required to execute each line correctly and to apply the ghosting method to every step of the process, as explained here. Looking at your boxes as a whole I can see that you do manage to get many of them to converge on or near your plotted vanishing point, which is good, as you will be working on that more in the box challenge.
The rotated boxes exercise is a very challenging and complex exercise. Looking at your work here I can say you didn't do bad for your first try. Your boxes have some good rotation along the major axes and your gaps stay narrow and mostly consistent. There is still some wobble to your lines here, so keep in mind what I said above and the reading about "unit of work" and you should continue to improve on that in the future.
You have a good start here with your organic perspective boxes. I can see you tried to be more careful in your construction here and that you also tried to get your sets of parallel lines to converge consistently towards their shared vanishing points, that is something you will work on more in the next steps.
Overall I think you did a good job for your first attempt and you made a lot of progress by the end.
Next Steps:
For your revisions I would like you to do one page of ellipses in planes. Make sure you reread all of the links that I gave you before starting. Your focus here should be on taking your time and using the ghosting method to execute every mark you make to the best of your ability. Once you do that you will be ready to move on to the 250 Box Challenge.
Hello, thanks for your kind and insightful critique!
Yes, I admit I was feeling uncomfortable with drawing with shoulders and other exercises. But I like them because Drawabox convinced me it's the best way to build on fundamental skills.
Anyway, here's my revision that your requested. https://imgur.com/VfjBv9c
Thanks again for the critique!
Thank you for submitting your revisions. I can see a lot of improvement on this page when compared to your original work.
Your lines are much straighter and show less hesitation overall. Your ellipses are becoming more consistent as well. Something that may help you a little more is to try lifting your pen off the page to end your mark rather than trying to stop the motion of your arm. This should allow you to maintain that consistent and confident line. This applies to your ellipses as well.
Great improvement overall.
Next Steps:
Continue to the 250 Box Challenge!
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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