Okay, let’s see how you have improved

-On the organic forms I can definitely see that you are putting much more effort into the contour lines and overall there is a good improvement, you still need to keep working on the shape of your sausages but you can do it during your warm ups

Honestly I wasn’t expecting you to finish this set of revisions so fast, and I can still see some areas where you can improve..

-You did quite well on the shrimp demo and your mark making is much more deliberate and purposeful, although this did not carry over to your other constructions. One thing that I’m noticing is that you tend to jump a lot between working in with tri dimensional forms and working with flat shapes, this can be corrected by giving each drawing as much time and focus as possible. I also notice that you tend to focus more on the larger picture, instead you should focus on building each drawing one piece at a time and focusing on each individual mark and form so that you can draw them to the best of your ability.

• For example - once you've put a form down on the page, do not attempt to alter its silhouette. Its silhouette is just a shape on the page which represents the form we're drawing, but its connection to that form is entirely based on its current shape. If you change that shape, you won't alter the form it represents - you'll just break the connection, leaving yourself with a flat shape. We can see this most easily in this example of what happens when we cut back into the silhouette of a form.

Instead, whenever we want to build upon our construction or change something, we can do so by introducing new 3D forms to the structure, and by establishing how those forms either connect or relate to what's already present in our 3D scene. We can do this either by defining the intersection between them with contour lines (like in lesson 2's form intersections exercise), or by wrapping the silhouette of the new form around the existing structure as shown here.

-Lastly, I can see that you have some trouble with the proportions, some of your drawings end up being quite large, I am not too concerned about this and I’d like you to focus more on the points I raised above, but it’d be very helpful if you can address this issue, my only advice is that this can be corrected by simply taking more time to plan your constructions.

You still have some things to keep working on so I’ll leave you some additional homework but to ensure that this time you can get the most out of it, I’ll give you some recommendations