1:09 AM, Wednesday June 1st 2022
Hi, Vennaya! I’ve broken down the homework critique below:
Lines
Superimposed Lines: Most of the lines look pretty good. The longer ones have slight arches on them, so take care to draw from your shoulder, not your elbow.
Ghosted Lines: These look pretty good.
Ghosted Planes: These look pretty good. There is some slight arching, but nothing too major.
Ellipses:
Tables of ellipses: In Tables of ellipses #1, some of the ellipses don’t fit snugly in the frame. In Tables of ellipses #2, the smaller ellipses tend to overlap the bigger ones. Whenever you do this exercise again, aim to keep all ellipses nice and snug in the frames, but not overlapping each other.
Ellipses in planes: Pretty good–the lines are mostly confident and the ellipses have been drawn through the appropriate amount of times. However, as with the table of ellipses, some of the ellipses don’t fit snugly within the planes.
Funnels Exercise: Pretty good. Some of the bigger ellipses on the edges are either overlapping or not fit snugly inside the funnel. And some of them have only been drawn through once, like the one on the edge on the bottom right.
Boxes:
Plotted Perspective: Nice work, but it may be beneficial to have more boxes in each frame. Is there a reason the middle frame’s boxes have hatching on different sides?
Rough Perspective: It’s normal for this exercise to come out looking a little rough, no worries. Just make sure that when plotting the lines back to the vanishing point, they should only extend TO the horizon line and not PAST it. Also, take care not to redraw a line even if it comes out wonky (frame on the right).
Rotated Boxes: As Uncomfortable says, he knows this exercise is above a lesson 1 student’s level so he doesn’t expect perfection. The boxes look pretty good here, but would benefit from hatching as Uncomfortable’s example homework displays.
Organic Perspective: Take advantage of the line weight in the big swoopy line, to help the viewer know which part of the line is closest to them; perhaps extending that line so it fills the frame would provide more space for boxes, so there’s a gradual shift from big to small boxes. To encourage the illusion of close/far boxes, perhaps draw some that have been cut off from the frame, like in the second frame of the first page. Don't worry too much about perspective, you'll have the chance to practice that in the 250 box challenge.
Trust in the process-there's a reason for everything Uncomfortable puts on the website. Hope this critique is helpful!!
Next Steps:
One page of Rough Perspective: Try making the boxes smaller so more can fit in a frame. Remember not to redraw lines and to only plot the lines back to the horizon line and no further.
One page of Tables of Ellipses: Make sure the ellipses fit snugly in their frames and don't overlap each other.