Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction
4:20 PM, Monday October 3rd 2022
It took me quite awhile to finish this exercise.
Hi, I will be looking over your homework today ^^ Congrats on making it through the second Lesson!
I'll point out what you did well first before mentioning where I think you can improve in. If you have any questions after this, feel free to ask me!
Arrows Your arrows are drawn with fluid and confident lines. You seem to understand how they flow through space and wrap, twist and turn in it quite well. They also fluently move away or towards the viewer, giving the perception of 3D space. I only noticed a minor thing. You seem to go over your lines several times in your arrows. We avoid that, since it tends or risks making your lines wobbly. Only give it another pass on the sections where you have to emphasize which line is above which, for example in places where the arrow twists and has several lines over one another. There's no need to mark the entirety of the arrow. This part explains it well: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4
Organic Forms You've drawn your lines confidently and your sausage forms turned out well. Good job on drawing through the ellipses twice and making them turn in space. I don't think there's anything else I can point out here.
Texture You seem to understand Texture really well. Most students tend to have a lot of trouble with this assignment or rush it. You're sticking to the cast shadows and the gradient flows very smoothly from dark to light. Good job :> There's nothing to complain about on the dissection part either, you've done really well!
Intersection Intersections are quite hard, but I think you handled them really well. All of the objects are drawn as if they are in the same space with none of them seeming as if they float far away or close to the viewer, good job! Your lines are looking great as well. Only thing I want to mention is for the cylinders and cones. In theory, what you did isn't wrong, I just noticed the lines you used made it hard to understand what I'm looking at and where the actual form ends and begins. You can make another pass over the outlines of the form (Ghosting again and placing one confident line) to make the forms more readable or you look over this part again: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4 Most students tend to mark in just the ellipse. I know you've done it in some, I just thought it'd be worth mentioning.
For the organic intersections there isn't really much to complain about either. The forms look really floppy and in 3D space. The cast shadows follow the forms of the sausages the fall on. You can try experimenting with different sizes of sausages if you choose to include this in your warm-ups!
That's it from me! I hope my advice can help you a bit and I'm wishing you all the best in the next Lesson!
Head onto Lesson 3!
Thank you for taking your time to critique. I'll keep in mind to ghost lines while drawing ellipses and cones to make it more readable.
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.